Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I hope you are doing well. I am writing this letter to you should a teacher which your two children your languege for a year.

Firstly, I compeleted course of English languege for 2 year. I have experienced teacher and I think I am a best teacher for your children. Moreover I take care of your children and spend 3 to 4 hour per day and improve more skill for daily life.

Furthermore, I want this job because I have no job and I want a respectfull job and I want a small family. I think your family is very small and I feel comforable with your children. In addition, I have no money and you know every person have daliy routine expenses. So I want earn money and pay rent home and other expenses. I hope you sellect me for this job because I can properly care your children.

I look forward to hearing from you,

Yours faithfully,

Usman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose of the letter and give reasons for applying, including wanting work and needing to cover expenses. You also mention teaching and caring for the children, so the reader can understand your general suitability. However, the task asks why you are suitable to teach your language, while you say you completed an English course; this does not clearly establish your ability to teach the language intended. The additional help you could offer is also only briefly stated as caring for the children and spending time with them. Develop these points with relevant examples, such as your teaching experience, activities you could organise, or household help. The reasons for wanting the job are clearer, though they could be expressed more tactfully in a formal application.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.5

The letter has a recognisable structure: an opening, a paragraph about your suitability, a paragraph giving reasons, and a closing. Sequencing words such as “Firstly,” “Moreover,” and “Furthermore” help signal the movement between ideas. However, the progression is sometimes mechanical, and several points are crowded together, particularly the reasons about wanting a job, a small family, and money. The connection between teaching and caring for the children could also be made clearer. Some sentences are difficult to follow, which weakens the links between ideas. Group related points into focused paragraphs and use clearer references and transitions, rather than relying mainly on a list of linking words.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

Your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate the basic purpose of the letter, with relevant terms such as “teacher,” “children,” “job,” and “expenses.” However, the range is limited and several spelling and word-choice errors make the writing less clear or natural. Examples include “languege,” “compeleted,” “respectfull,” and “sellect,” as well as the unclear phrase “a small family.” Some combinations are also awkward, such as “improve more skill for daily life.” Use precise language for your qualifications and the help you can offer, and check spelling carefully. A wider set of natural phrases for teaching, childcare, and household support would make the letter more effective and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.0

You use mostly simple sentences and attempt to connect ideas with clauses beginning “because” and “and.” The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but errors occur frequently and some sentences are difficult to understand. For example, “I am writing this letter to you should a teacher” lacks a clear grammatical structure, while “I have experienced teacher” is missing a suitable article and has an unclear construction. There are also problems with verb forms and sentence structure in “I want earn money” and “every person have.” Practise building complete sentences with a clear subject and verb, and check articles, agreement, and infinitive forms. More accurate control of these basics would make your message easier to read.

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