Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr and Ms Jonas,

I hope this letter finds you well. I am writing to show my interest towards the job you advertise for french tutor for your two childrens. I am a certified trainer with over nine years of experience. I am giving basic and advanced level training depends of individual level of understanding. I achieve several awards from children welfare society after considering my behaviour and bonding with children and also the way I present my content and knowledge with them. I chose esay tricks for quick learning and with the help of rhymes taught students lessons which is a plus point that no other teacher will do.

In addition to this, I am good in kitchen and help your family to serve delicious snacks and dinner after my class.

If required I can provide a demo on the first day of my class. I want to mention that in the starting phase of my career I used to work on Indian restuarant where I prepare several dishes and then It become my hobby to serve people as It provides a feeling of happiness.

The main reasons I am applying for this job are, firstly, that it is related to my profession. Providing home tuition would allow me to increase my overall earning. Secondly, the part time job alongside tution allows me to increase my overall earning which I can use to pay my Home loan more early.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain your teaching experience and child-friendly methods, offer to prepare food, and give reasons for applying. The details about awards, using rhymes, and your restaurant experience make the letter relevant and show some development. The suitability point is the strongest, while the extra help and motivation are less fully explained. In particular, the reasons focus mainly on earning more and paying your home loan, so they do not explain much about why teaching this particular family or living in Australia appeals to you. To strengthen the response further, develop each point more evenly and connect your skills and personal reasons directly to the couple’s needs and their children.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening that states your interest, a paragraph about your teaching suitability, a section on additional help, and a final explanation of your reasons. Linking phrases such as “In addition to this” and “The main reasons” help signal the shifts. However, the progression within the final paragraph is less clear because both reasons repeat the idea of increasing your earnings, and “firstly” and “secondly” do not introduce distinct motivations. Some sentences also contain several ideas, making the flow less smooth. Grouping related details more tightly and using clearer links between your experience, family contribution, and motivation would make the organisation more effective.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use a relevant range of vocabulary for teaching and family life, including “certified trainer,” “individual level of understanding,” “rhymes,” and “home tuition.” These choices communicate your experience and proposed contribution. However, several word choices, collocations, and spelling errors reduce naturalness, such as “interest towards,” “two childrens,” “esay tricks,” “restuarant,” and “tution.” Some phrases are also repetitive or imprecise, particularly the repeated reference to increasing your earnings. Aim to use standard spelling and more natural combinations, and choose precise language to describe your teaching methods and motivation. This would make the letter sound more fluent and professional without requiring unusually advanced vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mix of sentence forms, including longer sentences that explain your experience and methods, and the meaning is generally understandable. Some grammatical errors remain, especially with articles, plurals, verb forms, and sentence construction. For example, “for french tutor” needs an article and a capital letter for the language, while “two childrens” uses an incorrect plural form. In “I am giving basic and advanced level training depends of individual level,” the verb pattern and preposition are not controlled. The final paragraph also has an awkward construction after “are.” Review article use, subject–verb patterns, and how to connect clauses; then check punctuation and capitalisation so that your varied sentences are more consistently accurate.

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