Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing this letter to about a advertisement seen the your you tube channel. You write the the advertisement need a teacher for childern. My name is jaspreet kaur. I doing master degree then do a regular study at cambridge college. I want do this job because australia stay in my relative. I would be suitable job for me. I want job in abroad because my family condition bad.

I doing a teach your childern and learn a many language and other physical skills and do your family care take. I doing you childern teach a respect old people and parents and learn a physical activity and respect with freinds and play togerther.

I want do the job because my family condition is very bad and do the job will help a family member and siblings. Because my little sister and brother do the study will help a they study.

Hoping for prompt respons

Yours lovingly,

Jaspreet Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you say you are studying for a master’s degree, offer to teach the children and help care for the family, and explain that the income would support your family. These details make the letter relevant, but the reasons for your suitability are not clearly connected to teaching: studying at college is mentioned without explaining your language ability or experience with children. The additional help you offer is also difficult to interpret, and the reasons for wanting the job are repeated rather than developed. The opening and closing establish a letter format, although “Dear sir” is not tailored to the couple. Explain your qualifications and practical contribution more clearly, and develop each point with specific, relevant details.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The response has separate paragraphs for your introduction, proposed help, and reasons for applying, so the reader can identify the main areas of the letter. However, progression within those paragraphs is often unclear. For example, the first paragraph moves from the advertisement to your studies, relatives in Australia, and your family’s financial situation without clear links. The repeated use of “I want” and “because” makes connections mechanical, while phrases such as “Because my little sister and brother do the study will help a they study” are difficult to follow. Organise the letter around the three task points, use clear transitions, and make each sentence explain or support the point before moving on.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use a small set of relevant words, including “teacher,” “children,” “study,” and “family,” which helps convey the general purpose of the letter. However, vocabulary is basic and repetitive, and several word choices or spellings make the intended meaning difficult to understand: “childern,” “freinds,” and “care take” are examples. Some phrases are not natural in this context, such as “my family condition bad” and “I doing a teach your children.” Aim to use accurate, natural expressions for qualifications, childcare, and motivation. For instance, “financial difficulties” is clearer than “family condition bad,” and “look after the children” is more idiomatic than “do your family care take.”

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The letter relies mainly on short, simple statements, with a few attempts to connect ideas using “because.” These attempts are often faulty, and frequent errors in verb forms, articles, and sentence construction can make meaning difficult to follow. Examples include “I doing master degree,” “I want do this job,” and “I would be suitable job for me.” The sentence beginning “Because my little sister and brother…” is also incomplete and unclear. Practise complete sentence patterns such as “I am studying for a master’s degree” and “I would be suitable because…”. Use a consistent present tense to describe your current studies and abilities, and check that each sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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