Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Ems,

This is Joveil Jovenal, I am from the Philippines. I have seen your advertisment on one of the social media platform and would like to express my interest to teach your two children of my own native language for a year.

I believe that I am qualified for this job as I have my Bachelore's Degree and Master's in Education to give you a background about my educational qulification. I have an extensive experience in teaching elementary students for more that 10 years. Which gives me an edge to make learning different language to be more fun and exciting.

Apart from teaching my own language, I can still extend my service to child care if in case you need someone to look after your children when you and your husband needs to go at work during weekend. I am only available from Friday till Sunday from 8:00 AM till 5:00 PM.

With high hopes, I am looking forward to receiving this job as I am in need of extra income to sustain the medication of my grandmother.

Sincerly Yours,

Joveil Jovenal

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three requested points: you explain your teaching qualifications and experience, offer childcare, and give a reason for wanting the position. The details about your education and more than ten years of elementary teaching help establish suitability. The childcare offer is also specific, although the Friday-to-Sunday availability may not fully match the couple’s needs and could be clarified. Your reason for applying—helping pay for your grandmother’s medication—is clear, but it receives less development than your qualifications. To strengthen the letter further, explain briefly how your teaching experience would help these particular children learn your language, and add a more positive reason for wanting to live or work with the family.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening that states your purpose, followed by your qualifications, additional help, and motivation. Paragraphing makes these parts easy to locate, and phrases such as “Apart from teaching” signal a change of topic. Some links are less smooth, however. The sentence beginning “Which gives me an edge” is a fragment and does not connect cleanly to the previous sentence. The transition from your availability to your personal financial reason is also abrupt. For stronger progression, connect related ideas within complete sentences and use a brief closing transition that brings your offer and motivation together.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.0

You use an adequate range for a formal application, including relevant expressions such as “extensive experience,” “educational qualification,” and “child care.” These choices make your purpose understandable, and the reader can follow the letter despite some inaccurate spelling and phrasing. There are several errors in word form, spelling, or collocation, including “advertisment,” “Bachelore’s Degree,” “more that 10 years,” and “extend my service.” “My own native language” is also unnecessarily repetitive. Aim for more natural, precise expressions and proofread spelling carefully; this would make the letter sound more professional and show greater control of vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more complex sentence forms, and most of your meaning remains clear. For example, the opening explains your purpose, while the sentence beginning “as I have…” gives a reason for your suitability. Some grammatical errors remain. “Which gives me an edge” is a sentence fragment and should be joined to the preceding sentence. In “when you and your husband needs,” the plural subject requires “need”; “go at work” also needs a more suitable grammatical construction, such as “go to work.” The opening comma splice between “This is Joveil Jovenal” and “I am from the Philippines” should be corrected by using a full stop or conjunction. Review sentence boundaries and subject–verb agreement.

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