Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear John,

I am writing you , in reference to your advertisement on market place dated oct 20 looking for gujarati language tutor. I request to get considered for this role as I do possess relevant professional qualification in this regards.

Since past couple of years , I have been a professional tutor dealing with the language subjects like english , hindi and gujarati. I have done my masters in education as gujarati being my major subject. I have experience tutoring kids in understanding basic grammar, sentence formation and making them fluent by interaction and guided lectures.

As I am located within walking distance from your location at Birchwood , I believe I would be personally able to visit your place and conduct lectures rather than online lectures which I usually conduct.

Since last few months, I have been looking for a part time job through which I will be able to manage my domestic expenses and fees for my kids due to inflation , I really find it difficult to meet the ends.

I hope to hear from you soon.

Thanks,

Vishwa

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose by applying for the tutoring role and explaining your qualifications: you mention teaching Gujarati, a master’s degree in education, and experience helping children with grammar and fluency. However, the task’s three points are not covered equally. Your reasons for wanting the job are clear, but mainly focus on financial need. The second point—what else you could do for the family—is not really answered; being able to visit in person describes how you would teach, rather than an additional contribution. Develop this with a specific offer, such as helping the children practise Gujarati through games or supporting them with another household activity. A clearer, fuller response to every bullet point would make the letter more complete.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally coherent arrangement: you introduce your application, describe your teaching background, explain the practical advantage of living nearby, and finish with your motivation and a closing. Paragraph breaks help distinguish these points. The progression is understandable, although the connection between your proximity and the family’s wider needs could be made clearer, and the final paragraph focuses on personal finances without linking this back to what you would offer them. Some linking phrases, such as “Since past couple of years” and “Since last few months,” are repetitive and do not express time naturally. Use a wider range of clear transitions and make each paragraph’s purpose explicit to improve the flow.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the topic, including “professional tutor,” “major subject,” “sentence formation,” and “guided lectures,” so the reader can understand your experience. There are also attempts at more formal expressions, such as “in reference to your advertisement” and “relevant professional qualification,” though some phrases are unnatural or imprecise. For example, “get considered for this role” and “meet the ends” do not sound idiomatic in this context; “be considered” and “make ends meet” would be more natural. Spelling and presentation also need attention, including “market place,” “oct,” and inconsistent capitalisation of language names. More accurate collocations and careful proofreading would strengthen your vocabulary control.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt a mixture of sentence forms, including a longer sentence explaining your teaching experience and a conditional-style statement about visiting the family. Most of the message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors and punctuation problems are noticeable. For example, “I am writing you” needs “I am writing to you,” while “Since past couple of years, I have been” requires a more accurate time expression and article, such as “For the past couple of years, I have been.” The sentence beginning “I have done my masters in education as gujarati being my major subject” is also awkwardly constructed and would be clearer as two clauses. Check comma spacing and avoid placing spaces before commas. More consistently controlled sentence patterns would improve accuracy.

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