Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir,

I hope you are fine sir. I am writing this letter that i seen your advertisement about teaching your two childrens for language for a one year. I am happy to teach your childrens as teacher. I am teacher in my valliage school from last 8 year with good reponds and last year school make me pricinipal and after the school I teach tuition at evening time and I have 10 students they take all subjects from me, so i thing it is good suitable job for me. I caring all responsibilty of my house because my father was experied and my mother live sick so I am only taking care of myself and house.I need students for teach them and make the money from them i will promise you sir that your children will learn all language and after the tuition i drop them at home sir.

I will wait your response with positive .

Thankyou,

Harsimran singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.0

You address the main purpose of the letter and include relevant information about your teaching experience, what you could offer the family, and why you want the position. For example, you mention eight years at a village school and tutoring ten students. However, the reasons for your suitability are not always clearly explained, and the offer to take the children home is brief and could be developed with other practical help you could provide. Your reason for wanting the job focuses mainly on earning money and caring for your household, so the letter gives only a limited picture of your motivation. Make each required point explicit and add a little supporting detail to clarify how your experience would benefit the children.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 5.0

The letter follows a recognisable format, with a greeting, an opening purpose, supporting details, and a closing. The ideas are generally relevant, but most of the content is placed in one long paragraph, making the progression difficult to follow. Several points are joined with repeated forms such as “and” and “so,” rather than being grouped and linked clearly. For instance, your teaching history, family responsibilities, and offer to take the children home appear in the same extended sequence. Use separate paragraphs for your suitability, additional help and motivation, and use clear transitions to show how each point relates to the job. This would make the organisation easier for the reader to follow.

Lexical Resource: Band 4.5

You use some vocabulary relevant to the task, including “advertisement,” “teacher,” “students,” and “responsibility,” so the reader can identify the main subject. However, the range is limited and several word choices, forms, and spellings make parts of the letter difficult to understand, such as “good reponds,” “pricinipal,” and “I thing it is good suitable job.” Some expressions are also unnatural, including “teach your two childrens for language” and “make the money from them.” Aim to use accurate, natural phrases for describing qualifications, language teaching, and motivation. Checking spelling and learning common collocations would help you express your ideas more clearly and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 4.5

The response communicates its basic message, but it relies heavily on long, joined sentences and shows frequent errors in sentence structure, verb forms, agreement, articles, and punctuation. For example, “I am writing this letter that i seen your advertisement” has an incorrect clause and verb form, while “I am teacher in my valliage school from last 8 year” lacks accurate article and tense patterns. The sentence beginning “I caring all responsibilty” also makes the relationship between ideas hard to follow. Try using shorter, complete sentences and practise present perfect forms for experience, such as “I have taught at a village school for eight years.” Capitalise “I” and use full stops to separate distinct points.

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