Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-10

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to reveal that your advertisiment grabs my attention as you are looking for the one who can teach your two kids my mother language which is Punjabi. I am teacher by my profession in this language at secondary school as well as I take online classes.

Furthermore, I would like to explain that, I have flexible time of teaching online to your kids with tranlation if required. In addition, i can take offline classes on weekends while visiting to your house providing home atmosphere to make childs learns easily.

Anyway, I am interested to teach because at present, i am facing financial crises that forces me to work over the time. last but not least, i teach from basics of language which is neglected by many tutors.

I hope you will appreciate my proposal and give a chance to elavorate my skills.

Sahil

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the main purpose of the letter and give relevant information about your suitability: you teach Punjabi at a secondary school and also offer online classes. You also mention possible weekend visits and explain that you want the work for financial reasons. However, the family-support point is not fully developed: “providing home atmosphere” is unclear and does not explain what else you could do for the family beyond teaching. Your reasons for wanting the job are also limited, focusing mainly on financial pressure rather than interest in the children or cultural exchange. Develop each requested point more clearly, and make the letter’s purpose and offer more explicit.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a generally clear sequence: you introduce the advertisement, describe your teaching availability, give a reason for applying, and close with a request for consideration. Paragraph breaks help separate these stages. Some linking is mechanical or not quite suited to the relationship between ideas: “Furthermore,” “In addition,” and “Anyway” do not always create a smooth progression, and “last but not least” introduces a point without a clear connection to the financial reason. The reference to “this language” is understandable but could be clearer by repeating “Punjabi.” Use fewer formulaic transitions and organise the three requested points into distinct, connected paragraphs.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “secondary school,” “online classes,” “flexible,” and “financial crises,” so the reader can understand your main message. There are also attempts at more specific expressions, but several choices or spellings are inaccurate or unnatural, such as “advertisiment,” “tranlation,” “elavorate,” and “home atmosphere.” Phrases such as “reveal that your advertisement grabs my attention” and “work over the time” are not natural in a formal application letter. Choose conventional, precise wording—for example, say that you are responding to the advertisement and can provide additional help with the children’s learning. Proofreading spelling and collocations would make your vocabulary more effective.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including the sentence beginning “I am writing this letter…” and the clause “because at present, I am facing…”. The overall meaning is usually recoverable, but some grammatical errors affect clarity and control. Examples include the missing article in “I am teacher,” the agreement error in “make childs learns,” and the sentence fragment-like construction “I teach from basics of language.” Capitalisation is also inconsistent in “i” and “last.” Practise accurate articles, plural forms, subject–verb agreement, and sentence boundaries. A clearer version of the teaching offer would be: “I can teach the children online and provide translation if needed.”

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