Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear sir,

I am writing in response of your advertisement for someone to teach your two children for the year in native language. I am interested in this opportunity.

I believe i am suitable for this jobs because Punjabi is my first language, and i have good communication skills. I am patient, friendly and enjoy spending time with children. I can teach them through stories, songs and games in daily life conversations by making learning fun and interesting.

Apart from teaching i can help you in your household works and make Punjabi traditional food for whole family and introduce you my culture and traditions. I am also happy to help children in their homework.

I want this job because i love to learn new experience while living in Australia and meet new people which will improve my communication skills. and it also great opportunity to share my own language with other.

I look forward hear your response.

Your faithfully

Raman

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.5

You address all three points in the task: you explain your suitability through Punjabi being your first language and your patience with children, offer help with homework, household tasks and cooking, and give reasons for wanting to live in Australia and meet people. These details make the letter relevant and your purpose is clear. The suitability point is the most developed, with practical teaching methods such as stories, songs and games. By comparison, your reasons for wanting the job are less fully explained; you could say more about why teaching your language to these particular children appeals to you. The family-help offers are relevant but would benefit from a little more detail to make your contribution clearer.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.5

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: you introduce your interest, explain your suitability, describe additional help, and then give your reasons for applying. Paragraphing supports this progression, and phrases such as “Apart from teaching” help signal a change of topic. The ideas are generally easy to follow, though some links are mechanical or unclear. For example, the final reason begins with “and it also,” which does not connect smoothly to the preceding sentence. The closing is present, but the transition from your reasons to the request for a response could be more polished. Use a wider range of natural linking expressions and check that each sentence connects clearly to the one before it.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use enough vocabulary to communicate the main points, including relevant terms such as “communication skills,” “traditional food,” and “culture and traditions.” The teaching examples also make your meaning clear. However, the range is somewhat limited, and several word choices or combinations are unnatural: “in response of your advertisement,” “household works,” and “learn new experience” do not sound idiomatic. “For whole family” also needs a more natural expression. These choices do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, but they reduce precision and fluency. Build a bank of common phrases for applications and family responsibilities, and check collocations as well as individual word meanings.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple sentences and longer structures, including the explanation that you can teach “through stories, songs and games … by making learning fun.” The main message remains understandable, but some grammatical errors recur. Examples include “I believe i am suitable for this jobs,” where the pronoun, number and sentence opening need correction, and “I look forward hear your response,” which needs a gerund after “look forward to.” The final sentence also needs clearer sentence boundaries and a complete structure. Review capitalization, articles, plural forms and verb patterns, then proofread each sentence for a complete and accurate construction. More consistent control would make the letter smoother.

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