Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Parents,

I am writing this letter to inform you that, i have seen an advertisement yesterday, in which you are looking for a teacher who can teach your two children a French Language for a year. I want to tell you that i have been teaching French from last 5 year one of the schools in Australia and i am TEF certified. I am very passionate about my job especcily teaching to youg ones its been almost 10 years that i am provide home tutions to youg students.

I am not only teaching the French but i will also make Frech like a game for students so that they can learn with fun.I have my youtube channel with the name of Learn French With Narvinder,in which you can watch some vedios and also show to to your children wheather they can understand it or not.Moreover i have uploaded some free session as well.

I am recently moved in your locality and just looking for a job. so it would be great if we can arrange some meeting next weekends so we can discuss further.

Waiting for your postive response.

Regards

Narvinder Singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address all three requested points: you describe your French-teaching experience and TEF certification, offer your YouTube channel and free sessions as additional help, and explain that you have recently moved nearby and are seeking work. These details make the letter relevant and give the couple a reason to consider you. However, the reasons for wanting this particular job are only briefly stated, and the extra support you could provide is not fully explained—for example, you could say how you would make lessons enjoyable or help the children practise outside lessons. The opening and closing are appropriate, but a clearer, more developed explanation of your motivation and contribution would make the response more complete and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: your qualifications appear first, additional teaching support follows, and your request for a meeting comes near the end. Paragraphing helps distinguish these points, and linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “so” show how ideas relate. Some connections are less smooth, however. The first paragraph combines your application, experience, certification, and enthusiasm in a long sequence, while “I am recently moved in your locality” begins the final paragraph without a clear link to why this makes you suitable. There is also an abrupt shift from describing your channel to asking the family to watch videos. Grouping related details more carefully and using clearer references would improve the progression.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use relevant vocabulary for the situation, including “TEF certified,” “home tutions,” “free session,” and “arrange some meeting,” so the reader can understand your experience and offer. There are also attempts at more specific language, such as describing French as a game and mentioning your YouTube channel. However, spelling and word-choice errors are noticeable, including “especcily,” “youg,” “vedios,” “wheather,” and “postive.” Some phrases are also unnatural or imprecise, such as “teach ... a French Language” and “looking for a job.” These issues reduce the accuracy and naturalness of the letter, although the main message remains understandable. Check spelling carefully and learn common collocations for teaching and job applications.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You attempt both simple and more extended sentence forms, including a sentence beginning “I am not only teaching...” and one explaining that you have taught for several years. The overall meaning is generally recoverable, but errors in tense, articles, agreement, and sentence boundaries are frequent enough to make some sentences awkward. For example, “I have seen an advertisement yesterday” mixes the present perfect with a finished past-time expression, and “I have been teaching French from last 5 year” has an incorrect time expression and number form. The opening also contains an unnecessary comma after “that,” and several sentences run together without spaces after full stops. Practise accurate past-time forms and divide long sentences into clear clauses.

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