Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to respond agaisnt your post on social media to educate your two kids your language.

Firstly, I would like to say that I am most suitable person to deliver your children such education acurately. I have done several foreign langauges courses from United Kingdom University. Presently I am teaching as a linguistic teacher in a college nearby your town.

Secondly, I am also professional athelete and can deliver my experience to your children after class. Such kind of activities are very beneficial for young ones.

Thirdly, this job is very indeed for me at this time because you know inflation has emerged in our country. Nowadays servival is very complicated towards financial circumstances. I have to fulfill the basic requirements of many family as a leader of the house.

I look forward to your positive response on my hiring.

Yours faithfully,

Arshad Khan

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 6.0

You address all three requested points: you explain your language-teaching background, offer to share your experience as an athlete, and give financial reasons for wanting the position. The teaching experience and university courses are relevant evidence of suitability, while the athletic offer adds a useful extra contribution. However, some points are not fully developed: you do not specify which language you would teach or give examples of how you would teach the children, and the additional help you could provide is limited to sport. The reason for wanting the job focuses mainly on financial pressure, so adding a positive reason—such as interest in living in Australia or working with children—would make your motivation more complete. The purpose is clear, though the letter could be more tailored to the couple.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement: an opening, three paragraphs corresponding to the task points, and a closing. The sequence is easy to follow, and signposts such as “Firstly,” “Secondly,” and “Thirdly” help the reader identify each point. However, this reliance on numbered transitions feels mechanical, and the ideas within paragraphs are not always linked smoothly. For example, the move from your teaching qualifications to your current college role could be connected by explaining how that experience prepares you to teach children. The phrase “such kind of activities” also has an unclear reference. Use more natural links between related ideas and make references explicit, while retaining the clear paragraph structure.

Lexical Resource: Band 5.5

You use vocabulary relevant to the situation, including “linguistic teacher,” “professional athlete,” “financial circumstances,” and “basic requirements.” These choices show an attempt to express your qualifications and motivation with more than basic language. However, several spelling errors and inaccurate or unnatural word combinations reduce precision: “agaisnt,” “acurately,” “langauges,” and “servival” are misspelled, while “respond against your post” and “deliver your children such education” are not natural expressions. “This job is very indeed for me” also does not communicate your intended meaning clearly. Proofread spelling and learn common collocations for applications and teaching; more precise wording would make your ideas sound more fluent and professional.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 5.5

You use mostly clear simple sentences and attempt some longer structures, such as “I have to fulfill the basic requirements of many family as a leader of the house.” The main message remains understandable, and the letter includes a range of sentence purposes. Some grammatical errors remain, however. In “I am most suitable person,” an article is needed before “most suitable person”; “many family” requires a plural form; and “I am writing this letter to respond … to educate” has an unclear grammatical relationship between the purpose and the advertisement. The sentence beginning “because you know inflation…” is also awkwardly constructed. Aim to build a few accurate complex sentences, and check articles, plurals, and how clauses connect.

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