Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-11-12

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Samantha,

My name is Nafisa Anjum. You can call me Nafisa. I have seen the advertisement you put up for tutoring your children and I am writing to you to let you know about my keen interest in teaching them.

First and foremost, from my perspective this job suits me perfectly because I was not only born but raised in Bangladesh for 25 years. My family focused on speaking in fluent Bangla and we were allowed to explore our mother-tongue through arts and culture. Moreover, being deeply rooted in our culture, I often participated in poetry shows.

Furthermore, I can also teach your children German as long as they are interested. I have acquired German language certification from the Goethe Institute and can speak very fluently.

In spite of this, I would like you to know that I am an international student residing in Australia for my PhD so I urge you to have a glance at my resume since it would help me immensely with my student loan. I will be sure not to disappoint you. Have a good day!

Yours sincerely,

Nafisa Anjum

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response: Band 5.5

You address the three requested points: you explain your Bangladeshi background and experience with Bangla, offer German as an additional language, and state that the job would help with your student loan. These details make your interest clear, but the suitability point is only partly developed: participating in poetry shows suggests cultural familiarity, yet you do not explain your teaching experience or how you would teach the children. The offer to teach German is also conditional and less relevant than describing another practical contribution to family life. The closing request to look at your résumé shifts attention towards your financial need. To strengthen the letter, give specific evidence of teaching ability and explain more directly what you could do for the family.

Coherence and Cohesion: Band 6.0

The letter has a clear overall arrangement, with an opening followed by separate paragraphs for your suitability, an additional skill, and your reason for applying. Linking expressions such as “Moreover” and “Furthermore” help signal progression. However, some transitions are mechanical or do not express the relationship accurately: “In spite of this” introduces your student status and motivation, but there is no clear contrast with the previous point. The final paragraph also combines your reason for wanting the job, a request to review your résumé, and a promise not to disappoint, so its focus becomes less clear. Use transitions that match the meaning and keep each paragraph centred on one purpose to make the progression more natural.

Lexical Resource: Band 6.5

You show a good range of vocabulary, including “deeply rooted in our culture,” “participated in poetry shows,” and “international student,” and your meaning remains clear. Some less common expressions are used with awareness, though a few choices are not quite natural or precise for this letter. For example, “focused on speaking in fluent Bangla” is an awkward way to describe your family’s language use, while “have a glance at my resume” sounds informal and does not clearly convey a professional request. “Keen interest” and “immensely” are understandable but somewhat formulaic or overstated in context. Aim for natural, professional collocations and precise wording; this would build on the range already demonstrated.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: Band 7.0

You use a variety of sentence structures, including the complex construction “because I was not only born but raised in Bangladesh for 25 years” and the conditional “as long as they are interested.” Many sentences are accurate and easy to follow, and punctuation is generally controlled. A few grammatical choices remain awkward: “I was not only born but raised” would be more balanced as “I was not only born but also raised,” and “I am writing to you to let you know about my keen interest in teaching them” is structurally correct but unnecessarily repetitive. The sentence beginning “I urge you to have a glance at my resume since it would help me immensely” also makes the reference of “it” less clear. Continue varying sentence forms while checking parallel structures and clear pronoun reference.

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