Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-24

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Mr. Ram,

The purpose of writing this letter is to inquire about advertisement on the newspaper regarding the native language tutor for the children.

Firstly, Being the native of Punjab, I do have good command on the language. Besides this, before moving to Australia I was working as Punjabi teacher in school. Moreover, I passed my native language exam here for the immigration purposes. Moreover, I can also provide the classes for other subjects such as mathematics and sciences.

On the top of that, I worked as a chef in the hotel and willing to help in household chores such as cooking, washing cloths and hovering the living room. I am happy help you for babysitting of the kids in your absence.

Fortunately, I just commuted to this city last weak, and looking for the suitable job. I need this job to gain the experience as well as to support myself for future.

I hope to hear from you soon .

Yours faithfully,

Narveer Kaur Khosa.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of your ideas is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention your experience as a teacher, expanding slightly on your teaching methodology or how you engage children would have strengthened your application. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the content is relevant throughout, meeting the requirements for a Band 6.5 performance.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into distinct paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'Besides this', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the use of these devices is occasionally repetitive or slightly mechanical. For example, starting two consecutive sentences with 'Moreover' disrupts the flow. Additionally, the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs could be smoother. The overall progression of ideas is clear, and the paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'inquire', 'native language', and 'household chores'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'commuted to this city' (should be 'moved to') and 'hovering the living room' (should be 'vacuuming'). You also have some spelling errors like 'weak' instead of 'week' and 'cloths' instead of 'clothes'. While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise vocabulary usage to reach a higher band.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'Being the native of Punjab' (should be 'As a native of Punjab'), 'I do have good command on the language' (should be 'a good command of'), and 'I am happy help you' (should be 'happy to help you'). Punctuation is generally functional, though there are some inconsistencies with spacing and capitalization. While these errors are noticeable, they do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, which is consistent with the Band 6 descriptor.

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