Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-26

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest for the position of a person who can teach Punjabi language to your child in a year.

I am the suitable one for this job because I am professor in a college of the same profession.I know how to teach kids and make enjoyable subject for them. So, they can learn things faster and easily. I also take exam of your both kids after each my lesson. So, i know there level and efficiency.

While, teaching them I can handle your kids in your absent as nanny. So you can enjoy your time together.

furthermore, I am looking for any foreign experience to get a career opportunity. This job doesn't boost my career but it also gives me the exposure to learn the tradition and culture of your country.

I hope you give me that chance, i am waiting for your response.

Thanks

Vicky

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The response addresses all three bullet points of the prompt: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of why you are suitable is brief, and the mention of being a 'nanny' is a bit abrupt. To improve, you should expand on your teaching methodology or specific experience with children to make your application more persuasive. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear Sir/Madam' is slightly generic given the prompt specifies writing to a 'couple'. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the ideas could be more thoroughly elaborated to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organised into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'furthermore' and 'while', though some transitions feel a bit mechanical or forced. The referencing is occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'I also take exam of your both kids after each my lesson', where the connection between ideas is slightly disjointed. Improving the flow between sentences by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer to their antecedents would strengthen the coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your main points clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'exposure', 'opportunity', and 'tradition'. However, there are some word choice errors and awkward phrasings, such as 'I am the suitable one' instead of 'I am a suitable candidate' and 'make enjoyable subject' instead of 'make the subject enjoyable'. To achieve a higher score, try to incorporate more precise collocations and avoid repetitive sentence structures. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and professional terminology will help convey your suitability more effectively.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('the position of a person'), subject-verb agreement ('I am professor'), and punctuation (missing spaces after periods). Additionally, there are errors in word order and preposition usage, such as 'I am waiting for your response' being slightly informal for the context. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are noticeable throughout the text. Focusing on proofreading for basic grammatical accuracy and refining your use of articles will significantly improve your score.

Browse more IELTS Writing model answers or get your own writing scored by the same AI examiner.