Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-28
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Bhagirath,
My name is Gulshan, I saw an advertisement from your family in Australia, to teach your children English language for a year.
Secondly, I have more than 7 years of experience as teacher at IBU Secondary school. So, I can teach your children English language. Moreover, I have done my Master's in English. And I will be helping your kids how to get good grades in English.
In addition, I can guide your children how to speak and write in a proper way in English. It will help your kids to have good grip on vocabulary at English Language. And I will keep mock tests regularly at Friday's then you can know the results of your children. And you can find the improvement every weak. I Just resigned my job at IBU secondary school. So, right now I am looking for a Job to survive.
To conclude, I can teach you children for a year. this will help them to know about your language.
Regards,
Gulshan
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, the reason for wanting the job—'to survive'—is quite informal and lacks the professional tone expected in a formal letter. While the task requirements are met, the content could be expanded with more professional detail to better persuade the reader. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter, though it occasionally slips into overly simplistic phrasing.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5
The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Secondly', 'Moreover', 'In addition', and 'To conclude'. However, some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or are used incorrectly, such as starting the second paragraph with 'Secondly' when there was no 'Firstly'. Additionally, the flow between sentences is sometimes choppy due to short, simple sentence structures. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used naturally would help improve the overall cohesion of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'advertisement', 'experience', and 'improvement'. However, there are several instances of awkward word choice and minor errors, such as 'have good grip on vocabulary at English' (should be 'in English') and 'every weak' (spelling error for 'week'). To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise collocations and avoid repetitive phrasing. The range of vocabulary is sufficient for basic communication but lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I have more than 7 years of experience as teacher' (missing article 'a'), 'I will be helping your kids how to get' (awkward structure), and 'I Just resigned my job' (unnecessary capitalization). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of apostrophes, such as 'Friday's' instead of 'Fridays'. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall accuracy of your writing.
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