Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr and Mrs Pal,

I just come across you advertisment you published in the Sydeny's local Newspaper, regarding the requirement of tutor for your two childern. I am interested for this role. I have teaching experience of more than a half decade, with good command on english language. In addition, currently I work as a maths teacher in ABC school.

Moreover, beside teaching your childerns mathematics, I can help them to develop effective communication skills. Futhermore, I was football player in my college times, If your childerns have a interest in this I will coach them as well. Therefore, they will not only develop their academic skills but also develop more interest in physical sports in long run this will help them to stay physically and mentally fit. While, I already doing a one job but a still need this job for pay my tution fee for my Master's degree, I will be very thankful to you ig you cuncider me for tutor job.

I am expecting positive response from you.

Your Sincerely,

Sheebu

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for applying. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your teaching experience, providing a specific example of a teaching achievement would have strengthened your candidacy. Similarly, the reasons for wanting the job are clear but could be expanded to show more enthusiasm or professional alignment with the family's needs. Overall, the task is fulfilled, but the content lacks the depth required for a higher band score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical progression, moving from the introduction to your qualifications, additional skills, and finally your motivation. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Furthermore', and 'Therefore' to link your ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly awkward, such as the transition 'While, I already doing a one job'. Paragraphing is present but could be more distinct to separate the different requirements of the task. Improving the flow between sentences would help the reader follow your argument more naturally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'tutor', 'academic skills', and 'physical sports'. However, there are several spelling errors ('advertisment', 'Sydeny's', 'childern', 'cuncider') and some awkward phrasing, such as 'more than a half decade' and 'in my college times'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on more precise collocations and ensure accurate spelling of common words. The range of vocabulary is sufficient for the task but lacks the flexibility and precision expected at higher levels.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I just come across' (should be 'I have just come across'), 'I am interested for this role' (should be 'in this role'), and 'If your childerns have a interest' (should be 'an interest'). There are also issues with article usage and verb tense consistency. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your meaning, they occur frequently enough to impact the overall fluency of the letter. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and preposition usage would be beneficial.

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