Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-07-29

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Jelly,

I hope you are doing well. I see your advertisement in newspaper yesterday. I will have applied job regarding teach your two children learn our Australia of language. I am staying in Australia last four years. So I know very well our Australia local language.

I am right now study in Tom university. This year is my last year study in that university. In my career overall three years of experience home made works like cooking, cleaning, and how take cake children. Because of whole works did in my past years. I should definitely suitable for this job.

Moreover, I can take many work do in your home like, cooking, some cleaning in your home and take cake your children like drop in school by car. Therefore, one of best advantages I can teach our Australia language guidance for your children very deeply. I can above mentions help for your family.

Moreover, Right now, I am looking for job part-time at 2pm to 7pm. Because of saving some money and got experience. I am right now study in hotel management course. That job it is good for my up coming career growth.

I hope you understand my request for that job.

Yours Sincerely,

Ronak Rathod.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited by the language proficiency. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a family, though the opening 'Dear Jelly' is likely a misunderstanding of the prompt's placeholder. The ideas are relevant, but the explanation of why the candidate is suitable is repetitive, focusing heavily on household chores rather than the pedagogical aspect of teaching a language. To improve, you should expand on your specific teaching methodology or experience with children to better persuade the parents.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover' and 'Therefore' to link ideas. However, the use of these devices is sometimes mechanical or slightly inaccurate, such as starting a sentence with 'Because of whole works did in my past years.' The progression of ideas is logical, but the transitions between sentences could be smoother. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used in the correct context would significantly enhance the flow of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it is quite basic and repetitive. You frequently use phrases like 'take cake' (likely meaning 'take care of') and 'do in your home,' which are not natural collocations. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and some terms are misused, such as 'our Australia of language' instead of 'the Australian language' or 'English.' To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning more precise collocations and avoiding the repetition of simple verbs like 'do' and 'make.'

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tenses ('I see your advertisement' instead of 'I saw'), word order, and article usage. Many sentences are simple, and attempts at more complex structures often result in errors, such as 'I will have applied job regarding teach your two children.' While the meaning is generally clear, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction hinders the overall quality of the writing. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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