Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir/Madam
I am writing to express my interest in the position you have posted in the advertisement .I am really interested in teaching punjabi language to your children.
I have all the skills and qualities which should be required as a good teacher.I have strong demand on both english as well as punjabi.since I worked as english teacher in india and punjabi is my first language .So I can easily interpret both language to your children.which can make their understanding clear on the punjabi language .
Moreover,i have done my diploma in childcare .I can look after your children.If you need extra to provide beside classes.I can stay with them.
The main reason I want to do this job.I want to get experience to work with children.I want to know their behaviour and habits.How can i tackle with different situation if i would start work as childcare in nursery school.It provide me learn something different too because before i provide classes to old students
Apart from that,I am residing near to your location.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, while you mention your diploma in childcare, you could have elaborated more on how this specifically benefits the children. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir/Madam' is less ideal given the prompt specifies the advertisement is from a 'couple' (a name or 'Dear Mr and Mrs X' would be better). Overall, the response is relevant and covers the requirements sufficiently for this band.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and occasionally inaccurate. For example, the sentence 'If you need extra to provide beside classes' is fragmented and lacks a smooth transition from the previous thought. Additionally, there are issues with punctuation, such as missing spaces after periods and commas, which disrupts the flow of the text. Using a wider range of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition to') would improve the logical progression between your ideas.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'I have all the skills' and 'I want to get experience'. There are also some awkward collocations, such as 'strong demand on both english' (should be 'strong command of') and 'tackle with different situation' (should be 'handle different situations'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more specific terminology related to teaching and childcare, such as 'pedagogical approach', 'nurturing environment', or 'bilingual proficiency'.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors in grammar and punctuation. Common issues include subject-verb agreement, missing articles, and incorrect sentence boundaries (e.g., 'The main reason I want to do this job.I want to get experience...'). The use of capital letters is also inconsistent, particularly after punctuation marks. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. Focusing on basic sentence construction and proofreading for punctuation would significantly improve your accuracy.
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