Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-01

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. and Mrs. Smith,

Recently I saw a advertisement in which you mentioned that you are looking for a professional teacher who can educate secondary language to your children for an entire year. I will be grateful to educate your offspring. Because, I am multilingual and have a grasp over 5 different languages which are English, Hindi, Punjabi, Japanese and french. Furthermore, My previous occupation was a university professor for 5 years.

Moreover, not only I can provide online classes on platforms like zoom or teams, I can do it in-person as i just came to Australia for my further education But also i am have gymnastic and help your children to stay fit and exercise daily which can be helpful for them.

Lastly, it will be win-win condition for us, Since i can also learn few custom and tradition about Australian individuals like to do.

thank you very much for your time and i would love to discuss my application further through video call.

warm regards,

Parminder Singh.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points in the prompt: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. The ideas are relevant and clear. However, the development of these points is somewhat brief. For instance, while you mention being a university professor, you could have elaborated more on your teaching methodology to better persuade the parents. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though some phrasing, such as 'win-win condition', is slightly informal for this context. Overall, the response covers the requirements well, but could benefit from more detailed expansion to reach a higher band.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices like 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', and 'Lastly' to guide the reader. However, the transition between ideas is sometimes mechanical, and the use of punctuation is inconsistent, which occasionally disrupts the flow. For example, the sentence starting with 'But also i am have gymnastic' is poorly connected to the previous clause. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'multilingual', 'occupation', and 'custom and tradition'. There are some word choice errors, such as 'educate secondary language' (should be 'teach a second language') and 'offspring' (which sounds unnatural and overly clinical in this context). Additionally, 'i am have gymnastic' is an incorrect collocation. While your meaning is generally clear, the vocabulary is somewhat limited and occasionally imprecise. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding overly formal or awkward word choices.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('i am have gymnastic'), missing articles ('a advertisement'), and capitalization errors ('french', 'i'). The sentence structure in the second paragraph is particularly fragmented, which hinders clarity. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to be noticeable. Focusing on subject-verb agreement, consistent capitalization, and proper sentence construction will help you achieve a higher score.

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