Band 7.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 7.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-02

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 7.0)

Dear Sir,

five

I am writing to inform you that I can teach Punjabi language to your children. As I have seen an endorsement in Australia from a couple. Then, I came to know that you are seeking a punjabi tutor for your children.

Being a mentor, it will very convenient for me to help learners to learn new things from me. I used to be tutor in primary school and gained experience of five years in teaching. Furthermore, spending time with yougsters gives me pleasure.

By geeting this job, I would not only enhance language skills but also provide moral values to children, which can reduce the pressure of their parents. Parents can pay more attention to office work by giving me responsibilty of children. My main motive to opt this job is gaining more experience in teaching. Moreover, I can earn competitive salary in Australia that would be a fantastic chance for me.

Expecting your corporation in with regards.

Your faithfully,

David

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, although the opening 'Dear Sir' is slightly generic given the prompt specifies a 'couple'. Your ideas are relevant, though the development is somewhat brief. To reach a higher band, you could provide more specific examples of how you would teach the language or what specific 'moral values' you intend to impart. Overall, the message is clear and the purpose of the letter is fully achieved.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each serving a distinct purpose. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore', 'By getting this job', and 'Moreover' to link your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by minor mechanical errors, such as the stray word 'five' at the beginning of the text and the awkward phrasing in the final sentence. The use of paragraphing is appropriate for a letter format, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. Improving the variety of your linking words would further enhance the cohesion of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your meaning clearly. You use some topic-specific vocabulary like 'mentor', 'tutor', and 'competitive salary'. However, there are several spelling and word-choice errors, such as 'yougsters' (youngsters), 'geeting' (getting), and 'corporation' (cooperation). These errors do not impede communication, but they do limit the precision of your writing. To improve, focus on proofreading for common spelling mistakes and try to incorporate more sophisticated collocations related to teaching and professional correspondence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are frequent grammatical slips, such as 'I used to be tutor' (missing article 'a'), 'give me responsibilty of children' (missing article 'the'), and 'Your faithfully' (incorrect possessive form). Additionally, the sentence 'Expecting your corporation in with regards' is grammatically awkward. While you attempt complex structures, the control is inconsistent. Increasing your focus on articles, prepositions, and correct verb forms will help you achieve a higher level of accuracy.

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