Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mohit,

I saw your advertisement in newspaper that you are looking for a tutor for your kids to teach them Punjabi language.

I am willing to teach them Punjabi. I am native Punjabi tutor and did master's in Punjabi from Chandigarh University. I have teaching experience of 5 years.

I worked in day care for 6 months and I have experience for take care of children. As you mentioned in advertisement that you and your wife worked full-time and need someone to take care of kids after the school for 3 hours, i am able to do that as well.

I moved to Australia last year and due to some family issues I am unable to do full-time job. When I saw your advertisement I feel I am able to do this job as I live two streets away from your location and my availability is flexible.

I will attach my contact details and my qualification history with this letter. You can contact me through phone or email. I am happy to start my job as soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,

Deep

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points required by the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. Your ideas are relevant and clearly presented. To improve, you could expand slightly on your teaching methodology or specific activities you would do with the children to make your application more persuasive. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter, though the closing 'Yours faithfully' is typically used when the recipient's name is unknown; since you addressed the letter to 'Mohit', 'Yours sincerely' would be more accurate.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter follows a logical structure, with each paragraph focusing on a specific aspect of the task. You use some cohesive devices, such as 'As you mentioned' and 'due to', to link your ideas. However, the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words. Some transitions feel slightly mechanical, and the paragraphing is a bit fragmented. Using more sophisticated cohesive devices would help the ideas transition more smoothly, which would elevate the overall readability of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for this task, using terms like 'advertisement', 'qualification history', and 'flexible'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'experience for take care of children' (should be 'experience in taking care of children') and 'did master's' (should be 'completed a master's degree'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise academic or professional terminology and ensure that collocations are natural and accurate.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is generally effective. However, there are several grammatical errors, particularly with articles ('in newspaper' should be 'in the newspaper') and verb tenses ('I feel I am able' should be 'I felt I would be able'). Additionally, there are some punctuation and preposition errors, such as 'experience for take care of'. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and consistent tense usage will help improve your accuracy.

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