Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Blackky,

I am writing this letter to you because I am interested in a job that you posted in the newspaper's advertisement last week.

I have an experienced Hindi language teacher, and I have still been teaching in a local school for the last 4 years. In addition, teaching is a hobby, and I love to provide free classes to those who are not able to afford it.

Although currently I am teaching in school, and it is different as compared to one-on-one classes, I know I will do better and give my best. Moreover, I want to work with a family; therefore, I get a different working environment.

I read your ad and gathered that you are paying a good salary. I promise to you after getting tuition from me, you children will be get first rank in the school.

Thank you for your time, and I look forward to your response.

Kind regards,

Mann

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: your suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, you mention you could do 'more' for the family, but you do not specify what this entails (e.g., helping with homework, household chores, or cultural activities). The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear Blackky' is slightly informal for a job application. To improve, ensure you provide concrete examples of how you would support the family beyond just teaching the language, as this would make your application more persuasive and fully developed.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion. You use some cohesive devices such as 'In addition', 'Although', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between your teaching experience and your desire to work with a family could be smoother. Paragraphing is present, but the paragraphs are quite short, which affects the overall structure. To reach a higher band, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph develops a single, clear theme.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message, such as 'advertisement', 'environment', and 'tuition'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'I have an experienced Hindi language teacher' is incorrect; you should say 'I am an experienced teacher'. Additionally, 'get first rank' is not natural English; 'achieve top marks' or 'excel academically' would be better. The vocabulary is sufficient for the task, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. For example, 'I have still been teaching' is awkward; 'I have been teaching' is sufficient. There are also issues with articles and verb forms, such as 'your children will be get first rank', which should be 'your children will get the top rank'. While these errors do not prevent the meaning from being understood, they demonstrate a lack of control over more complex grammatical forms.

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