Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-04
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Parents,
I hope you are doing well.
I saw your advertisement in the newspaper, You lived in Australia for last two years. So, you are looking for tutor from their Hindi language. I did master in language course and I mentioned in specific hindi language. Recently, I achieved awared in this language
Many times I did extra work during study time because child not learn only language but gesture as well. During that time I would like to teach some extra activity like respect for every person. This time is very pheomeneon for the family.
I can doing my field job in this field but I have only 3 days job in week. I would like to learn child so much that is the main reason behind this, I learned approximately 40 children every months in my country. So, I am suitable for this position.
Thank you for your time, you can grab more details in my website.
Best Regards,
Meet Panchal
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is limited by language barriers. For example, the explanation of suitability is vague, and the mention of 'extra activity' is not clearly linked to the family's needs. The tone is somewhat inconsistent for a formal application, and the purpose of the letter is occasionally obscured by grammatical errors. To improve, you should provide more specific details about your teaching methodology and clearly articulate how your presence would benefit the children beyond just language instruction.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is limited and sometimes mechanical. For instance, the transition 'Many times I did extra work' does not logically connect to the previous paragraph. Referencing is also occasionally unclear, such as in the sentence 'This time is very pheomeneon for the family,' where the meaning is difficult to interpret. Improving the use of linking words (e.g., 'furthermore', 'consequently', 'in addition') would help create a smoother flow between your ideas and improve the overall logical progression.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is basic and often inaccurate, which hinders the clarity of your message. There are several word-choice errors, such as 'achieved awared' instead of 'received an award' and 'pheomeneon' used incorrectly. The range of vocabulary is limited, relying on simple structures that do not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher bands. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to professional applications and teaching, and ensure you are using words in their correct grammatical form. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives and professional terminology will significantly enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede communication. Examples include 'You lived in Australia for last two years' (tense error), 'I did master in language course' (article and preposition errors), and 'I can doing my field job' (verb form error). While you attempt some complex ideas, the lack of control over basic sentence structures and verb tenses makes the writing difficult to follow. Focus on mastering subject-verb agreement, correct tense usage for past and present events, and the proper use of articles to improve your accuracy.
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