Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir or Mam,

I hope you and your family doing well. Recently, I seen an advertisement you are looking someone who teach language to your kids. Moreover, I can teach to your children because I just complete my course which is based on multi language. So, now I am certified language teacher. Additionally, I will not only teach language to them but also deliver information about important festivals which are related to culture and many more things I will teach them. They will learn a lot from me.

However, I want this job because if you give me this opportunity it will record in my experience. Moreover, it lead positive outcome in my life. Such as, I can write my experience in my resume for future. I am waiting for your reply.

Best regard,

Riya Patel.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. The explanation of suitability is brief, and the reasons for wanting the job are somewhat superficial. To improve, you should expand on your teaching experience and provide more specific examples of how you would assist the family beyond just teaching language and culture. Because the response is under-length, it fails to fully develop the required content, which impacts the overall score.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized into paragraphs, and the progression of ideas is generally clear. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Additionally', and 'However', although these are sometimes used mechanically or slightly inappropriately (e.g., 'However' is used to introduce a reason rather than a contrast). The paragraphing is sufficient for a short letter, but the overall flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that transitions between sentences are smoother. The letter follows a standard formal structure, which is appropriate for this task.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on simple phrasing, such as 'teach language' and 'many more things'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'I seen' (should be 'I saw') and 'multi language' (should be 'multilingual'). To reach a higher band, you should incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to education and professional experience, such as 'pedagogical skills', 'cultural immersion', or 'professional development'. The current range is sufficient to convey the message, but it does not demonstrate the flexibility required for higher scores.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include: 'I hope you and your family doing well' (missing 'are'), 'I seen' (incorrect tense), 'I just complete' (should be 'I have just completed'), and 'it lead positive outcome' (should be 'it will lead to a positive outcome'). You rely mostly on simple sentence structures. To improve, you need to focus on subject-verb agreement, verb tenses, and the correct use of articles. Incorporating more complex sentence structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, would also help demonstrate a wider grammatical range.

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