Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir or madam,

I am writing this letter to you for showing my interest towards your advertisement . I am anmol , from India , working as a teacher in a public school I think I would be the better option for this role since I have been teaching Punjabi to the students from the past 7 years that’s why I have experience of dealing with students in a calm way as well as I am really good in delivering my ideas to them.

Apart from teaching , I think I could easily do some another tasks for your family as well. I can easily cook meals for them and if you will need my help for the proper nourishment of your children’s I would love to assist you, along with it I am also good in housekeeping, and easily handle all the household activities alone.

I am looking for this job, since I am finding good opportunities for my career and I think this job would definitely give me a great exposure in my life through which I can also earn big chunks of money for my family and also fufill their needs. I am looking forward meeting with you please consider my application and give me a chance working with you.

Yours faithfully,

Anmol

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter of application. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For example, when discussing your reasons for wanting the job, the mention of 'earning big chunks of money' is slightly informal and lacks the professional nuance expected in a formal letter. To improve, ensure that your motivations sound more career-oriented and professional, and expand slightly on how your specific teaching experience would benefit the children in an Australian context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on one of the required points. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Apart from teaching' and 'along with it' to transition between ideas. However, some transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The use of 'that’s why' is slightly informal for a formal letter. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences, and ensure that the progression of ideas within paragraphs is smoother and less reliant on simple conjunctions.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You have an adequate range of vocabulary to convey your message clearly. You use relevant terms like 'advertisement', 'nourishment', and 'housekeeping'. However, there are some instances of awkward word choice or informal phrasing, such as 'big chunks of money' and 'dealing with students in a calm way'. Additionally, there are minor errors in word form, such as 'children’s' (should be 'children'). To improve, focus on using more precise, professional collocations and avoid overly colloquial expressions when writing formal correspondence.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is always clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. For instance, 'I am writing this letter to you for showing my interest' should be 'to show my interest'. There are also punctuation issues, such as the space before the comma in 'children’s ,'. Subject-verb agreement and preposition usage are generally accurate, but the sentence structure could be more varied. To improve, focus on proofreading for small errors in articles, prepositions, and punctuation, and try to incorporate more sophisticated complex sentence structures.

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