Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sharma couple,

I am writing about the advertisement you posted regarding teaching Punjabi language to your children.

I am a Punjabi teacher in Canada and I have 5 years of experience of teaching this language. I take online classes for international students, It would be a good opportunity for your childs to interact with other students and learn in an effective way.

Apart from teaching them, I would like to help you to lessen your burden to do kids assignments of other subjects such as, Mathematics and English. It would save your time as well as the tution fee, if you are paying to another tutor because I would not charge any extra fee.

I found this job interesting Because I have some students from the same city, you are currently living in. It would be easy for me manage the schedule because of same timezone. I would appreciate it, if you would hire me.

I await to your prompt response.

Kind Regards,

Parminder Kaur

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have successfully addressed all three bullet points in the prompt. You clearly explained your suitability as a teacher, offered additional help with other subjects, and provided logical reasons for wanting the position. The tone is appropriate for a formal letter to a potential employer. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are slightly more developed; for instance, when mentioning your experience, you could briefly describe your teaching philosophy or specific methods used to engage children. Overall, the response is relevant and fulfills the requirements of the task effectively.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Each paragraph focuses on a specific aspect of the prompt, which helps the reader follow your ideas easily. You use some cohesive devices like 'Apart from teaching them' and 'It would be', which help connect your thoughts. However, the transition between sentences could be smoother in some areas. To improve, try to use a wider range of linking words and ensure that referencing is always precise. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter format.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'opportunity', 'effective', and 'prompt response' correctly. There are some minor errors, such as 'lessen your burden to do kids assignments' (which is slightly unnatural) and 'tution fee' (spelling error). While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the variety and precision of more advanced lexical choices. To improve, focus on using more sophisticated collocations and ensure accurate spelling of common professional terms.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'It would be a good opportunity for your childs to interact...'. However, there are several grammatical slips, including 'childs' (plural of child is children), 'I await to your prompt response' (should be 'I await your prompt response'), and some punctuation errors, such as the comma splice in the second paragraph. While these errors do not impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. Focus on subject-verb agreement and proofreading for small errors in prepositions and plurals.

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