Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-11

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear friends,

I am writing a letter to regarding this job.i hope both of you are very well. Recently I read your news Regarding your children language.Furthermore ,i have already teach online class for children who are lived in outside of my country nowadays so many parents had this issue to related their children speaking because they want their kids learn also Punjabi language and it will help their pronunciation and their future.

Moreover I really help you it will be suitable job for me because I also teach my freind’s children who are lived in Australia same time I can attend their classes.To add ,I promised to you I do my all efforts do good.its really good time for you to learn the children for new language.I really thankfull to you if you give me one chance to do this job.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the content is underdeveloped and lacks the necessary detail to fully satisfy the task requirements. Furthermore, the letter is under the 150-word minimum, which significantly impacts the score. The tone is somewhat informal for a professional application, and the ideas are presented in a fragmented manner, making it difficult for the reader to follow the applicant's qualifications clearly. To improve, you should expand on your teaching experience and provide more specific examples of how you could assist the family beyond language instruction.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks a clear structure. While there is an attempt at paragraphing, the ideas within the paragraphs are not logically sequenced. The use of cohesive devices is mechanical and often misused, such as 'To add' and 'Furthermore', which do not flow naturally within the sentences. The referencing is also unclear at times, particularly when discussing the children in Australia. To improve, focus on using transition words more accurately and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that links back to the main purpose of the letter.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. There are frequent errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'I am writing a letter to regarding this job' and 'I really help you it will be suitable job'. The phrasing is often unnatural, which hinders the professional tone required for a job application. To reach a higher band, you should work on using more precise vocabulary related to teaching and professional communication, and ensure that your word choices are grammatically appropriate for the context.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors, including issues with verb tenses ('I have already teach'), subject-verb agreement ('children who are lived'), and sentence structure. Many sentences are run-on or fragmented, making the text difficult to read. Punctuation is also inconsistent, with missing spaces after commas and incorrect capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic sentence construction and proofreading for common errors like tense consistency and article usage. Increasing the variety of sentence structures will also help improve your overall grammatical range.

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