Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-16
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Warner,
I hope you are doing well. My name is Malhar Bhavsar and I am a professor of Hindi Language at Gujarat University. I recently saw your post on Facebook and I inclined towards teaching your two sons Hindi. Because, it is a rarest post I came across from an Australian citizens.
Furthermore, I have done my masters in Hindi Literature and I think I will be the best prospect for this job due to my nine years of teaching experience in Hindi language.
In addition to that, since I have to teach your children remotely from India I can accommodate classes whenever they want. Also, I can give you guys an additional lessons at no extra cost if you are interested.
As I mentioned earlier, I was surprised by this job post and I appreciate that you both are respecting this language and wants your children to learn it. English is universal language worldwide but Hindi is a mother of all languages.
I will wait for your positive response. Thank You so much for your time.
Yours Faithfully,
Malhar Bhavsar
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when you mention what else you can do for the family, you simply offer 'additional lessons,' which is a bit vague. To improve, you could expand on how you might assist with cultural activities or homework support. Additionally, the claim that 'Hindi is a mother of all languages' is an over-generalisation that is not relevant to the task and detracts from the professional tone of your application.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organised into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to that,' and 'As I mentioned earlier' to connect your ideas. While these are functional, the flow between some sentences is slightly mechanical. To reach a higher band, try to vary your linking words and ensure that the transition between your personal motivation and the practical details of the job is smoother. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, and the overall progression of information is easy to follow.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'professor,' 'accommodate,' and 'prospect' correctly. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For instance, you wrote 'I inclined towards teaching,' which should be 'I am inclined to teach' or 'I am interested in teaching.' You also used 'rarest post,' which is unnatural; 'unique opportunity' or 'rare advertisement' would be better. The phrase 'you guys' is too informal for a letter addressed to potential employers. Focusing on more precise collocations and maintaining a consistently formal register will help improve your score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text, such as 'it is a rarest post I came across from an Australian citizens' (should be 'it is the rarest post I have come across from Australian citizens') and 'wants your children to learn it' (should be 'want your children to learn it'). Additionally, 'I have done my masters' should be 'I have completed my master's degree.' While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to limit your score. Working on subject-verb agreement and article usage will be beneficial.
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