Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-17

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

This is Vijay Sai, I saw the advertisement from the social media platform regarding teaching new language for kids.

Am ready to teach your kids our native language and national language. I know multiple languages like Telugu, Hindi and English. So i can help them in learning all the three languages with fluency.

I can also take care of your kids and household things until you come from office. I am in very need of this job because am doing my masters in Australia. Am a student seeking for parttime job to make money for my expense and rents. So if you give me the job it will be helpful for me and i return i will make you proud by teaching your kids with languages and good manners and by taking care of then in every need. So i hope i can do my best to teach and take care of them and makes them feel comfortable in my presence.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the tone is somewhat informal and lacks the professional polish expected in a formal letter to a prospective employer. For instance, the opening 'Dear Sir/Madam' is generic, whereas the prompt implies you are writing to a specific couple. While the ideas are relevant, they are somewhat underdeveloped. To reach a higher band, you should expand on your teaching experience or specific methods to demonstrate your suitability more convincingly, rather than simply stating you know the languages.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is generally coherent, and the progression of ideas is logical. You move from your suitability to your offer of extra help and finally to your motivation. However, the paragraphing is weak; the entire body of the letter is essentially one large block of text. Using clear paragraph breaks for each bullet point would significantly improve the structure. Additionally, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited. You rely heavily on simple conjunctions like 'and' and 'so'. Incorporating a wider range of linking words, such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition', would improve the flow between sentences.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task but remains quite basic. You use repetitive phrasing, such as 'teach your kids' and 'take care of them'. There is a lack of variety in your word choice, and some expressions are slightly unnatural, such as 'am in very need of this job' instead of 'I am in great need of this position'. To improve, try to use more precise vocabulary related to childcare and education, such as 'supervise', 'academic support', or 'cultural exchange'. Expanding your range of collocations will help you convey your message with more precision and professional tone.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, particularly with subject-verb agreement and article usage. For example, you write 'am ready' instead of 'I am ready' and 'seeking for parttime job' instead of 'seeking a part-time job'. You also have issues with punctuation and capitalization, such as the lowercase 'i' in 'So i can help'. While your meaning is generally clear, these errors are persistent. You should focus on using complete sentences with proper subjects and improving your control over basic grammar, such as articles and verb tenses, to ensure your writing is more accurate.

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