Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to request you about teaching English language to their children.

I am a teacher from last 3 years in primary school and i also provided private tution to few kids in their respected home. Also with the teaching them i take care to make daily schedule to them that helps their in school life. Apart from teaching them i can also prepare food for them and make sure to give it on time and get ready for school.

I really need this job beacuse i have some financial issues at home and i lost my job due to private reason.

I hope you will belive in me and give me chance for this job. I will make sure that i can give my best experience to them and make ready for future.

Thank you in advance.

Yours faithfully,

Dhruv Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the response is slightly under the 150-word minimum, which impacts the overall score. The ideas are presented but remain somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the explanation of why you are suitable is quite brief. To improve, you should expand on your teaching experience and provide more specific details about how you would support the family. Additionally, the salutation 'Dear Sir/Madam' is inappropriate here, as the prompt specifies you are writing to a 'couple' whose names you could have invented, or you should have used a more suitable opening given the context.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5

The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for this task. However, the progression of ideas is somewhat disjointed. The use of cohesive devices is limited and occasionally mechanical, such as the repetitive use of 'Also' and 'Apart from'. The transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is abrupt. To improve, try to use a wider variety of linking words and phrases to connect your sentences more naturally, such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to this', or 'Consequently', which would help the flow of the letter significantly.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is basic and functional, which is sufficient for a general task but lacks the range required for a higher band. There are some errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'request you about teaching' (should be 'apply for the position of') and 'respected home' (likely meant 'respective homes'). The phrase 'private reason' is vague and slightly unnatural in this context. To improve, focus on learning collocations related to employment and childcare, and ensure you use more precise terminology to describe your professional experience and personal circumstances.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with verb tenses ('I am a teacher from last 3 years'), articles ('the English language'), and sentence structure ('with the teaching them i take care to make daily schedule to them'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the lowercase 'i'. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent enough to cause some difficulty for the reader. You should focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct preposition usage, and ensuring that your sentences are grammatically complete.

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