Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear ............ ,
I am writing to explain why I am capable for the job of teaching your children my language .
Firstly I will start by letting you people know that I am graduate and holds a degree in computer science . I was born and brought up in the village where my language is widely spoken and as a graduate it will be more easier for me to communicate well and interact with your children ,I studied in a university where seventy percent of the people in my department communicate daily in my language making it easier for each and everyone to express each other .
During my time in high school it was made compulsory that the language must be used in our daily communication as to promote and make us get more used in interacting with our language and that helps me a lot in perfecting myself well in speaking my language .
I want to also use this opportunity to let you people know that I can also offer some computer class to your children as I am a degree holder in computer science .
I actually wanted this job because I am in serious need of money to support my family and I have been jobless since i graduated therefore i will be glad if the job will be offered to me .
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
The response addresses all three bullet points of the task. You explain your suitability through your educational background, offer additional help by mentioning computer classes, and provide reasons for wanting the job. However, the tone is somewhat inappropriate for a letter to a potential employer; phrases like 'letting you people know' and 'I am in serious need of money' are overly informal and lack the professional polish expected in a formal application. While the ideas are relevant, they could be developed with more focus on how your skills would benefit the children specifically, rather than focusing on your personal financial situation.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organised into clear paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Firstly', 'During my time', and 'therefore'. However, the flow is occasionally mechanical, and some transitions are repetitive or awkward, such as 'I want to also use this opportunity to let you people know'. Referencing is generally clear, but the logical progression between sentences could be smoother. The overall structure is sufficient for the task, but more sophisticated linking words would improve the cohesion.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic phrasing, such as 'I am graduate' (should be 'a graduate') and 'perfecting myself well'. There are some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'more easier' (a double comparative error) and 'letting you people know', which sounds informal and slightly blunt. To reach a higher band, you should aim for more precise, professional vocabulary related to teaching and professional qualifications, and avoid repetitive phrasing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally distract the reader. Examples include 'I am graduate and holds a degree' (subject-verb agreement), 'it will be more easier' (incorrect comparative form), and 'the language must be used... as to promote' (awkward phrasing). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with spaces appearing before commas. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct comparative structures would be beneficial.
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