Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-18
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sahil,
Recently, I saw an advertisement online that you are looking for a tutor for the Punjabi language for your children. I would like to apply for this position as I have completed my master degree in Punjabi and one year completed course in Art and craft. However, I have four year experience in teaching. Furthermore, I can help them in their other subjects too because I taught others subjects in high schools too. Right now, I am living in Canada. I teach in the morning time in School here but I am available in the evening. So, I can easily teach them online.
I want to apply for this position because I am planning to move in Australia in next year. So, I want to continue my career in Australia. I hope you consider me for this role. I hope to hear back from you soon.
Regards,
Gagandeep
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For example, while you mention your teaching experience, you could have provided more specific details about your teaching style or how you would engage children. The letter is functional and covers the requirements, but it lacks the depth of detail that would make your application more persuasive. To improve, try to expand on your ideas with specific examples or personal anecdotes related to your teaching experience.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter follows a logical structure, moving from the purpose of the letter to your qualifications, additional services, and finally your motivation. Paragraphing is present, though the body of the letter is somewhat compressed. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore' and 'So', which help the flow. However, the transition between ideas could be smoother. The use of 'However' in the second sentence is slightly misused as it does not contrast with the previous statement. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring they are used in the correct context would enhance the overall coherence.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to communicate your message clearly. You use some relevant terms like 'tutor', 'position', and 'career'. However, the range is somewhat limited and repetitive. There are minor errors in word choice, such as 'one year completed course' instead of 'a one-year course' and 'taught others subjects' instead of 'taught other subjects'. To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more precise collocations and a wider variety of descriptive language related to professional experience and personal goals.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. While the meaning is generally clear, there are several grammatical errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I have four year experience' (should be 'four years of experience'), 'move in Australia' (should be 'move to Australia'), and 'in next year' (should be 'next year'). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and preposition choice. While these errors do not impede communication, they are frequent enough to prevent a higher score. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct preposition usage will significantly improve your accuracy.
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