Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-19

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir and Madam,

I am Harneet , one of the Indian citizens.I am writing to express my interest in teaching Punjabi to your children as you advertised in the newspaper.

The most prominent factor that gravitates my interest towards this is my passion of teaching.Moreover , I also have volunteer experience of teaching all major subjects to primary students and commerce courses to high school learners owing to which I assume that am well suited for this position.

Besides this , I would also instruct some other academic subjects to your young ones in which they require assistance.Furthermore,If you would be interested ,I would educate your family about my tradition and culture that would help you to explore another country while staying in your own nation.

Moving further, Presently I am tight on my schedule because of personal and work commitments,however I do not want to give up my passion so that ‘s the reason that why I am applying for this position.Additionally , I am seeking for additional job from which I will earn more and which aids me in rejuvenating from hustle bustle of life.

I am looking forward to hear from you.

Yours faithfully,

Harneet kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.5

You have addressed all three bullet points of the task: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for applying. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the explanation of your reasons for wanting the job is slightly confusing; you mention being 'tight on my schedule' and seeking an 'additional job' to 'rejuvenate', which sounds somewhat contradictory or unprofessional in the context of a childcare/teaching role. To improve, ensure your motivations sound more focused on the children's development or the cultural exchange aspect, rather than personal financial or stress-relief needs.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each addressing a specific requirement of the prompt. You use a variety of cohesive devices such as 'Moreover', 'Besides this', and 'Furthermore'. However, some of these transitions feel slightly mechanical or forced. Additionally, there are minor punctuation issues, such as missing spaces after commas (e.g., 'Moreover ,') and inconsistent spacing throughout the text. Improving the flow between sentences and ensuring standard punctuation will help the letter read more naturally and professionally.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate a good range of vocabulary, such as 'prominent factor', 'rejuvenating', and 'hustle bustle'. However, there are some instances of awkward word choice or collocation. For example, 'gravitates my interest' is not a standard English collocation, and 'seeking for additional job' is grammatically incorrect (the verb 'seek' does not take 'for'). While your meaning is clear, refining your word choices to sound more natural and idiomatic would elevate your score. Focus on learning common collocations rather than using overly complex or slightly misused vocabulary.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is good. However, there are several grammatical errors that occur throughout the text. Examples include 'I am one of the Indian citizens' (unnecessary article usage), 'I would instruct some other academic subjects' (should be 'tutor' or 'teach'), and 'that ‘s the reason that why' (redundant phrasing). Additionally, there are issues with article usage and prepositional phrases. While these errors do not prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to keep the score in the 6.0 range.

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