Band 4.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 4.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 4.5)

recently bought a furniture from local store, but when it was deliveredto your home, it was damage

Write a letter to store manager.

describe whta you bought and when you bought it.

explain what wrong with the iteam

what you would like the store to

Dear manager,

I am writing to complain about piece of furniture that I recently purchased from your store. Unfortunately, it was damaged when it was delivered to my home.

I bought a sofa set from your store on Wednesday(15 August). I choose this sofa set because of its attractive design. The delivery was arranged in 20 august and i was expecting the sofa delivered in good condition.

However, The sofa was delivered on 22 August i was expecting on 20August. I notice one of the leg was broken. In addition, there was a crack also on the edges of the side. I immediately informed to the delivery person about the damage but he told me to contact the store directly.

I would like you to arrange a replacement as soon as possible. Alternatively, if replacement is not available, I would appreciate a full refund.

I look forward to hearing from you soon and hope this matter resolve As soon as possible.

Yours faithfully,

deepali

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 2.0

The response is completely off-topic. The prompt explicitly asked for a letter to a couple in Australia regarding a job teaching their children a language. Instead, the student wrote a formal complaint letter to a store manager about damaged furniture. Because the response fails to address the specific task requirements provided in the prompt, it cannot be assessed as a successful completion of the task. While the letter format is appropriate for a formal complaint, it does not fulfill any of the bullet points requested by the examiner regarding the language teaching position.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear structure, including a salutation, body paragraphs, and a sign-off. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the description of the purchase, the issue, and the desired resolution. Cohesive devices such as 'However', 'In addition', and 'Alternatively' are used to link ideas, although the overall coherence is undermined by the fact that the content is entirely irrelevant to the prompt. Despite the irrelevance of the topic, the internal flow of the letter itself is logical and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for a formal letter, using terms like 'purchased', 'replacement', and 'refund'. However, there are several errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'a furniture' (uncountable noun) and 'the iteam' (spelling error). The range is somewhat limited, relying on basic functional language. While the student can communicate the nature of the complaint clearly, the lack of variety and the presence of basic errors prevent a higher score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The student uses a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, such as 'I choose this sofa set because of its attractive design.' However, there are frequent grammatical errors, including missing articles ('one of the leg'), incorrect verb tenses ('I choose' instead of 'chose'), and awkward phrasing ('hope this matter resolve'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with capitalization after periods. While the meaning is generally understandable, the frequency of errors in basic grammar and sentence construction is noticeable.

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