Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-20
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Dear Sir,
I saw a advertisment regarding a job about teaching a language to childrens that is why I am writing this letter.
Let me explain first, actually I borned in PUNJAB and I did a degree in punjabi language. Even last year I also started to teach local language in colleges due to which according to me I am a perfect candidate for this job. to addition, I can do a lot of thing for children I can tech them HINDI language as well.
There are some reasons why I want this job. Firstly, I want to try my shelf because your kids have no idea about PUNJABI language. As a result I can test my teaching skills and I also work to improve my self.
Hope to have a positive response as soon as possible from your side.
yours faithfully,
Jaswinder Singh
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The response addresses all three bullet points: your suitability, additional help, and your reasons for applying. However, the letter is under the 150-word minimum, which negatively impacts the task achievement score. The ideas are somewhat underdeveloped; for instance, the explanation of why you are a 'perfect candidate' is brief and lacks detail regarding your teaching methodology. To improve, ensure you expand on your points to meet the word count and provide more depth to your arguments. The tone is also slightly inconsistent for a formal letter, as it lacks a professional opening and closing structure appropriate for a job application.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite limited and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'Let me explain first' and 'to addition' (which should be 'In addition') are used to transition between ideas, but they do not always flow naturally. The referencing is occasionally unclear, and the overall progression of the letter feels a bit disjointed. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words and ensure that each paragraph has a clear, singular focus that connects logically to the next.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is basic and repetitive, which limits your ability to express yourself precisely. There are several errors in word choice and spelling, such as 'advertisment' (advertisement), 'childrens' (children), and 'tech' (teach). You also use informal phrasing like 'try my shelf' (likely meaning 'test myself') and 'do a lot of thing', which are not suitable for a formal job application. To reach a higher band, focus on using more precise, professional vocabulary related to education and employment, and pay closer attention to spelling and standard collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response contains frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'I borned' (I was born), 'I did a degree' (I hold a degree), and 'I also work to improve my self' (I am working to improve myself). There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and the punctuation is inconsistent, particularly with the use of commas and capitalization. To improve, focus on mastering basic verb tenses and subject-verb agreement. Practicing the construction of complex sentences using subordinating conjunctions will also help you demonstrate a wider grammatical range.
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