Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-22

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this to express my interest for your requirement. Yesterday I have seen an advertisement from you, in regards of require tutor for your children who teach them other languages.

I really enjoy to work with your children.I am find this job rewarding.I have five years of teaching experience at private school. I can make children easily understand. I better understand that how to handle children's mood patiently. I also provide extra services to you.

Apart from teach them other languages, I also help them in their academic education. As I mentioned above that I have four years of teaching experience . I also teach them classical dance. I am sure you will never regreted to hire me as tutor for your children.

I will feel grateful to become a part of your family. I fascinated by exploring differenet cultures. I find australean culture very interesting and unique. Additionally teaching is my passion so I really enjoy it.

I am looking forward to receiving your

response.

Kind regards

Kiran

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional services, and reasons for applying. However, the development of these points is somewhat superficial. For instance, while you mention teaching experience, you do not elaborate on how your specific teaching style would benefit the children. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the opening 'Dear Sir or Madam' is slightly generic given the prompt implies you are writing to a specific couple. To improve, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more specific details to better persuade the reader of your suitability.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and repetitive. For example, the frequent use of 'I also' and 'I' at the start of sentences makes the flow feel a bit disjointed. Transitions between ideas could be smoother; using a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition to this' would improve the logical progression of your arguments and make the text feel more cohesive.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic verbs like 'enjoy', 'teach', and 'find'. There are also some awkward collocations and word choice errors, such as 'in regards of require tutor' (should be 'regarding the requirement for a tutor') and 'never regreted' (should be 'never regret'). To reach a higher band, try to incorporate more sophisticated vocabulary related to education and personal attributes, and pay closer attention to word forms and standard collocations.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There is a mix of simple and some attempted complex sentence structures, but the accuracy is inconsistent. You have several grammatical errors, such as 'I am writing this to express my interest for your requirement' (should be 'in your requirement'), 'I am find this job' (should be 'I find this job'), and 'Apart from teach them' (should be 'Apart from teaching them'). These errors are frequent and occasionally distract the reader, though they do not fully impede communication. Focusing on subject-verb agreement and correct verb forms will significantly improve your score.

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