Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-23
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Hello Sir,
I am writing regarding to teach your two children your language for a year. So, I am a good and certified tutor for the language coaching.
I am coaching a classes for some deferent Learning to student. as per like we are coaching of Guajarati, English, German, Hindi, Marathi. So, I will handle your children for the classes. I think, I am suitable for this because, I have courage, strength, ability, patience and more willing to eager how to learn with your child.
Sometimes, I am very important for the student give my time for the teaching classes. I know else I could do for the family. Very stainless situation for the mold of clay by the carrier for the children.
I have a lot of ideas, creates of multitasking in life. & it is my Significance and very helpful to us. most carrying teacher for the carrier. I want this because the all criteria fulfilled with me. that's the reason I want the job.
Your faithfully,
Ashish jems
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points, but the development of ideas is weak and often confusing. While you explain your suitability by mentioning your experience as a tutor, the explanation of what else you could do for the family is vague and lacks clarity. The reasons for wanting the job are also stated in a very general way ('all criteria fulfilled with me'). To improve, you need to provide more specific details about your teaching methods and how you would integrate into the family's life. The tone is also inconsistent for a formal letter of application, which affects the overall effectiveness of your communication.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is divided into paragraphs, but the logical flow between sentences is frequently broken. Many sentences are disjointed, making it difficult for the reader to follow your argument. For example, the transition between discussing your teaching experience and your personal qualities is abrupt. Cohesive devices are either missing or used incorrectly, such as the misuse of 'So' and 'as per like'. To improve, focus on using transition words like 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your ideas more smoothly and ensure each paragraph has a clear, singular focus.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and often used incorrectly, which hinders the clarity of your message. Phrases like 'stainless situation for the mold of clay' and 'creates of multitasking' are unnatural and do not convey the intended meaning. There are also several word-choice errors, such as 'deferent' instead of 'different' and 'carrier' instead of 'career'. To reach a higher band, you should focus on learning common collocations and using more precise vocabulary related to teaching and professional applications. Avoid using complex-sounding phrases if you are not certain of their meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter that often impede communication. Issues include incorrect verb forms ('I am coaching a classes'), missing articles, and awkward sentence structures ('I am writing regarding to teach'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with the use of '&' in a formal letter. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures, and your attempts at more complex sentences are often grammatically incorrect. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement and sentence construction before attempting more complex grammatical forms. Proofreading for basic errors like 'Your faithfully' (should be 'Yours faithfully') is essential.
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