Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-25

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear Alex,

i have seen your marketplace advertisement for your Childs to learn my native language which is Gujarati for a year. That's the reason i am reaching out to you i am not telling you that i am perfect for job i am the best in what i do i am doing this from last 5 year. which means what i bring to table is lots of expertise's and vast knowledge of teaching

which make me better fits compare to other for this role.

There are two children so learning on same time would de difficulty i know

because both have different levels of understanding one can learn quickly other gets some times so i will be flexible for both of them.

i really care more about more about people rather then money i want this job because i want more and more people can learn my language which makes me feel better so i defenativle give my 100% towards this

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these points is somewhat limited. For instance, the explanation of suitability relies on general claims rather than specific teaching methodologies. The section on 'what else you could do for the family' is missing entirely, as the text focuses only on the teaching aspect. The tone is also slightly informal and aggressive ('I am not telling you that I am perfect... I am the best'), which is not ideal for a formal job application letter. To improve, ensure each bullet point is fully expanded with relevant details and maintain a professional, polite tone throughout.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes the flow of ideas difficult to follow. There is a lack of cohesive devices to link sentences and ideas logically. For example, the transition between the introduction and the discussion of the children's learning needs is abrupt. The use of punctuation is also inconsistent, with many run-on sentences and a lack of capital letters at the start of sentences (e.g., 'i have seen', 'i am reaching out'). To improve, use clear paragraph breaks for each main point and incorporate linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to guide the reader through your argument.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive. There are several errors in word choice and form, such as 'expertise's' (should be 'expertise'), 'better fits' (should be 'a better fit'), and 'defenativle' (spelling error). The phrasing is often unnatural, such as 'what I bring to table'. While the meaning is generally clear, the limited range of vocabulary and the frequent errors in word formation prevent a higher score. To improve, focus on learning common collocations for professional correspondence and proofreading for spelling and word-form accuracy.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

The response contains frequent grammatical errors that affect the readability of the text. There are consistent issues with capitalization, subject-verb agreement (e.g., 'one can learn quickly other gets some times'), and sentence structure. The text consists mostly of simple sentences with some awkward phrasing. There is a lack of complex sentence structures, and punctuation is largely absent, which makes the text feel like a stream of consciousness. To improve, focus on basic sentence construction, ensure proper capitalization, and practice using conjunctions to combine simple ideas into more complex, accurate sentences.

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