Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-08-29
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Madam,
Hope you are fine. I am reaching out to show my interest in teaching your children. I am adept in my language and have won many prizes in language competitions. I believe my enthusiasm and skill is suitable for this opportunity. Currently, this is very easy to teach online due to fast growing technology. I have taught many students before over seas and still coaching many others.
I am very responsible and dedicated. I take classes punctually and also prefer to give extra time if any student need more explanation to comprehend. I can teach all the syllabus in a year. In addition, please let me know what is your requirement. I can arrange a demo class, to satisfy you.
Furthermore, my fees is very appropriate and I assure you of good results of your children.
Yours sincerely,
Sobia.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and motivation. However, the response is under the 150-word minimum, which limits the development of ideas. For instance, the explanation of why you are suitable is quite brief, and the mention of 'what else you could do for the family' is vague. To improve, you should expand on your specific teaching methods or the types of activities you could offer the children beyond language lessons. Because the response is under-length, it does not fully satisfy the requirements of the task, resulting in a lower score for this criterion.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which is appropriate for this task. There is a basic logical flow from the introduction to your qualifications and finally to your offer of a demo class. However, the use of cohesive devices is somewhat mechanical and limited. Transitions like 'In addition' and 'Furthermore' are used, but the connection between sentences could be smoother. The paragraphing is functional, but the overall structure feels a bit disjointed due to the brevity of the sentences. Increasing the length and using more varied linking words would help improve the flow and coherence of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using words like 'adept', 'enthusiasm', and 'comprehend'. However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation. For example, 'my fees is very appropriate' is unnatural; 'my rates are very reasonable' would be more standard. Additionally, 'coaching many others' is slightly imprecise in this context. While your vocabulary is sufficient to communicate your message clearly, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for a higher band. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive phrasing will help you achieve a higher score.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
The letter contains a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'my fees is' (subject-verb agreement), 'if any student need' (should be 'needs'), and 'what is your requirement' (word order). Additionally, 'over seas' should be one word ('overseas'). While these errors do not significantly impede communication, they occur frequently enough to prevent a higher score. To improve, pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement and ensure that your sentence structures are consistently accurate. Practicing proofreading for these common errors will be very beneficial for your future writing tasks.
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