Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-01
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.5)
Dear Sir or Madam,
I hope this email finds you well.
I am writing this letter to apply for a Thai language teacher that you have posted in the community group recently.
My name is Mya. I am from Thailand and can speak native Thai. I currently working as an educator in a community childcare centre and familiar to nurture ad develop children in your children's age.
As an educator, I am not only teaching Thai but I can create the activities while combining Thai language in your children's lesson. I understand that in that age of children like to learn through play and activities rather than remember words. That why I believe I can be a suitable person to teach your children a Thai language.
Furthermore, I can occasionally stay overnight on Friday or Saturday night if you would like to have a personal time with your partner or friends.
I hope you will consider my application because I am now looking for an extra job to cover my study. I am available from Wednesday to Friday 9 am - 4 pm. If stay overnight I will be available Only Friday and Saturday from 9 pm to 6 am.
Looking forward to hearing from you.
Best Regards,
Mya
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 7.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 7.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 6.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 6.0 |
| Overall | 6.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0
The letter covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You clearly explain your suitability as a Thai language teacher with childcare experience, offer additional help (babysitting), and state your reasons for wanting the job (financial support for studies). The tone is generally appropriate for a letter to a couple, although the opening salutation 'Dear Sir or Madam' is slightly formal for an advertisement placed by a family; 'Dear [Name]' or 'Dear Parents' would have been more natural. The ideas are well-developed and relevant to the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0
The letter is logically organized into clear paragraphs, each focusing on a specific aspect of the prompt. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Furthermore' and 'As an educator' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally slightly mechanical. The use of referencing is generally clear, though some transitions could be smoother to improve the overall progression of the letter. Overall, the structure is easy to follow and meets the requirements for a coherent response.
Lexical Resource — Band 6.0
You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'educator', 'nurture', and 'application'. There are some minor errors in word choice and collocation, such as 'familiar to nurture' (should be 'familiar with nurturing') and 'create the activities while combining Thai language' (should be 'incorporating the Thai language'). While these errors do not impede communication, they indicate a need for more precise control over word forms and collocations to reach a higher band.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0
You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I currently working' (missing auxiliary verb 'am'), 'in that age of children' (should be 'at that age'), and 'That why' (should be 'That is why'). These errors occur frequently but do not prevent the reader from understanding your message. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement and the correct use of prepositions. Increasing the variety of complex structures while ensuring accuracy will help raise your score.
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