Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.0)

Dear couple,

i hope you are well. i am writing a letter to you related to the advertisement which you showed. i have a good experience for teaching language as i am a punjabi teacher in my nation. i am a certified teacher. I tech them punjabi language as his roots is from punjab and i also teach them about our traditional festivals and culture. i want this job because i am new here as you know in australia we need to financial strong for survive here and i also like to teach our language with the help of that i also get lots of knowledge. i also have a instagram page i also give knowledge over there and you can check the reviews their.

Thank you

Mandeep singh

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0

The response addresses all three bullet points: your suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is limited, and the response is significantly under the 150-word minimum requirement. This under-length impacts the overall task achievement, as the ideas are not fully extended or supported. For example, while you mention being a certified teacher, you could have provided more specific details about your teaching methodology or experience with children to better persuade the family. To improve, ensure you expand on each point with more detail and reach the required word count.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0

The letter lacks clear paragraphing, which makes the structure feel disjointed. While there is a basic logical flow, the transition between ideas is abrupt. You rely on simple sentence structures and lack a variety of cohesive devices to link your points smoothly. For instance, the transition from discussing your teaching experience to your financial situation is sudden. Using linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' would help improve the flow and logical progression of your ideas. Organizing the letter into distinct paragraphs for each bullet point would also significantly enhance the overall structure.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.0

The vocabulary is generally adequate for the task but remains quite basic and repetitive. You use phrases like 'get lots of knowledge' and 'give knowledge', which are not natural collocations. There are also some errors in word choice, such as 'financial strong for survive', which should be 'financially stable to survive'. To reach a higher band, you should aim to use more precise vocabulary related to teaching and professional correspondence. Expanding your range of adjectives and verbs will help you express your suitability for the role more effectively and professionally.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('I tech them'), capitalization ('i', 'australia', 'punjabi'), and sentence structure. The use of simple sentences dominates the response, and there is a lack of complex grammatical structures. For example, 'i am a punjabi teacher in my nation' is a simple statement that could be combined with other information to create a more complex, fluid sentence. Improving your control over basic grammar, particularly verb tenses and sentence construction, is essential for clearer communication.

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