Band 5.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.0)
Respected Mam,
I am writing this letter about work as a teacher for your childrens for punjabi language for one year. I belong to punjab, but now I am in settle in Australia so, I want to teach your child because I was punjabi teacher in Punjabso, I have to two years experience of teaching and my punjabi is language is too good.
I teach with your childrens with hard working and makes your child well and god in punjabi language. I give both types of teaching written punjabi and oral punjabi.
I want this job, because I recent shift in Australia and I want do work related to my teaching career, so that is why, I want to teach your pupil's, because it best for both children's and best for my work. So, I am wait for your phone call.
I look forward hearing to you.
Your faithfully
Yashandeep kaur
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.0
The letter covers all three bullet points: your suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For example, you mention you can provide 'written and oral' teaching, but you do not elaborate on what else you could do for the family, such as household help or childcare, which was requested. The tone is also inconsistent; starting with 'Respected Mam' is not appropriate for a letter to a couple in Australia, where a more standard 'Dear Mr and Mrs [Name]' or 'Dear Sir/Madam' is expected. To improve, ensure you expand on your ideas with more detail and use a more natural, professional tone.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.0
The letter is divided into short paragraphs, which is a positive step. However, the progression of ideas is often disjointed due to the lack of effective cohesive devices. You rely heavily on repetitive sentence structures and basic connectors like 'so' and 'because'. There is a lack of logical flow between sentences, making the text feel like a list of statements rather than a cohesive letter. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking words such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition' to connect your thoughts more smoothly and improve the overall readability of your writing.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
Your vocabulary is quite limited and repetitive. You use basic terms like 'good', 'work', and 'teach' repeatedly. There are also several errors in word choice and form, such as 'childrens' (should be 'children'), 'punjabi is language is too good' (awkward phrasing), and 'I recent shift' (should be 'I recently shifted'). The use of 'pupil's' is also grammatically incorrect in this context. To reach a higher band, you need to use a wider range of vocabulary related to teaching and professional experience, and pay closer attention to word forms and collocations.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter that occasionally impede clarity. Issues include subject-verb agreement ('I have to two years experience'), incorrect verb tenses ('I am wait for your phone call'), and misuse of articles and plurals. The sentence structures are mostly simple, and attempts at more complex sentences often contain errors, such as 'I want do work related to my teaching career, so that is why, I want to teach your pupil's'. You need to focus on basic sentence construction, verb tense consistency, and proofreading for common errors like pluralization and punctuation.
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