Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-03

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Mr and Mrs Kelvin,

I hope you are well, I am writing this letter regarding the language tutor. I have seen your promotion on social media that you are looking for teacher to teach hindi to your childrens.

Although,there are numerous teachers available,but i have some special skills and knowledge about this langauge. I have masters in this language.In addition,my whole family is an teachor by profession.I have deep understanding about this language.

I can provide you special discount .As there is time difference between Australia and India,I will try to provide you time according to your students convien time.I will teach your childrens with more focus and attention so they does not face any difficulties.

I have need of urgent money. because my family is running through finanical crisis and also for my grandma is sick . apart from this am also thinking to expand my coaching center.

i am waiting for your responses.I really appreciate your decision.

Thanking you,

Ravi Ravi

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for applying. However, the tone is inconsistent and occasionally inappropriate for a formal job application. For instance, mentioning 'urgent money' and 'financial crisis' is unprofessional and shifts the focus away from your qualifications. While the task requirements are met, the development of ideas is somewhat limited. To improve, focus more on how your skills benefit the family rather than personal financial struggles, which may make the reader uncomfortable.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is mechanical and sometimes inaccurate, such as the awkward transition 'Although,there are numerous teachers available,but i have...'. Punctuation errors, particularly missing spaces after commas and periods, disrupt the flow of the text. The progression of ideas is generally logical, but the lack of sophisticated linking words makes the writing feel somewhat disjointed.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

The vocabulary is adequate for the task but lacks variety and precision. You rely on basic terms like 'special skills' and 'deep understanding' without providing specific examples of your teaching methodology. There are also errors in word choice, such as 'promotion' instead of 'advertisement' and 'convien time' (a misspelling of convenient). To reach a higher band, you should use more precise terminology related to education and professional communication.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including subject-verb agreement issues ('my whole family is an teachor', 'they does not face'), incorrect article usage, and persistent punctuation errors (missing spaces after punctuation). While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are noticeable and detract from the professional tone. You rely mostly on simple sentence structures; incorporating more complex sentences with correct subordination would improve your score.

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