Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-05
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
Dear Jon,
Good morning, I hope you are doing well.
i am writer this letter to approach you regarding the advertisement for the language tutor. My name is Sana and i live in Sydney, Australia. I have done my masters from Sydney School of English in English honors and have 6 years of the language experience with kids as well as the adults.
I just live near to the location you mentioned so i am available for flexible hours to do the work, which will not disturb the kids routine. With the English, i am good at the reginal cooking which i can offer you without any additional cost.
Nowadays i am not working professionally as i am 3 months pregnant and live in the house all day and missing my working period which can be relive through your kids and also good for my bank balance.
Your faithfully
Sana Smith
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: your suitability, additional help, and your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is quite limited. For example, while you mention your experience, you do not elaborate on your teaching methodology or how you would engage the children. The final paragraph regarding your personal situation is somewhat informal and lacks the professional tone expected in a formal letter of application. To improve, ensure that your reasons for wanting the job are presented in a more professional manner, focusing on your passion for education rather than purely financial or personal convenience.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter follows a logical structure with a clear opening and closing. Paragraphing is used to separate the different requirements of the task. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic. You rely heavily on simple sentence structures and lack a variety of linking words to connect your ideas more fluidly. For instance, the transition between your experience and your availability could be smoother. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider range of cohesive devices such as 'furthermore', 'consequently', or 'in addition to this' to improve the flow between sentences and paragraphs.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is generally adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for a higher score. There are several instances of awkward phrasing, such as '6 years of the language experience' and 'relive through your kids'. The word choice is often repetitive and simple. To improve, focus on using more precise collocations and professional terminology relevant to a job application. For example, instead of saying 'good at the reginal cooking', you could use 'proficient in regional cuisine'. Expanding your vocabulary to include more formal and descriptive terms will significantly enhance your writing.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter, including issues with verb tense, article usage, and sentence structure. Examples include 'i am writer this letter', 'I have done my masters', and 'With the English, i am good'. Additionally, the consistent failure to capitalize the personal pronoun 'I' is a recurring error that affects the overall quality of the writing. While the meaning is generally clear, these errors are frequent enough to cause some distraction. You should focus on proofreading for basic subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that all sentences are grammatically complete.
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