Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-06

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Mr. Patel,

I am writing in response to an advertisement regarding Hindi language course for your children.

As I am a teacher by profession, I can easily teach a new language in a systematic way. Also, I have been working for Kanan International, a top leading coaching centre for over five years. Hence, I have all the stationary items and the best video materials that can help to understand the concepts easily.

Apart from teaching Hindi language, I can teach your kids about cookery classes in the remaining time. Initially, I was a cook but I got better opportunity in coaching centre so I left the job.

Regarding the job, I am looking for a part time job for my extra source of income. Moreover, as I have expertise in teaching, your children will enjoy my classes.

I hope you will consider my request favourably, and I look forward to hearing from you.

Yours sincerely,

Anshu Patel

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter addresses all three bullet points in the prompt: suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat thin. For instance, the mention of 'cookery classes' is a bit abrupt and lacks detail on how this would benefit the children. The explanation of why you want the job is also quite brief, focusing primarily on income. To reach a higher band, you should expand on these points with more descriptive language and personal context to make the letter more engaging and persuasive.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a closing. Paragraphing is used appropriately to separate the different requirements of the task. You use some cohesive devices such as 'Also', 'Hence', 'Apart from', and 'Moreover' to link ideas. However, the flow between sentences is occasionally mechanical. For example, the transition between your teaching experience and the mention of 'stationary items' feels slightly disjointed. Improving the variety of linking words and ensuring smoother transitions between sentences would enhance the overall coherence of your writing.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, such as 'profession', 'systematic', 'expertise', and 'favourably'. There are some minor issues with word choice and collocation; for example, 'stationary items' should be 'stationery' (the former refers to being still, the latter to writing materials). Additionally, 'top leading' is redundant; 'leading' or 'top' would suffice. While the vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning clearly, it lacks the sophistication and precision required for higher band scores. Focusing on more natural collocations and avoiding minor errors will help improve this score.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.5

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, which is appropriate for this task. Most of your sentences are clear and easy to follow. There are some grammatical slips, such as 'Hindi language course' (should be 'a Hindi language course') and 'I was a cook but I got better opportunity' (should be 'a better opportunity'). Punctuation is generally accurate, and the letter follows the standard conventions of formal correspondence. To improve, try to incorporate a wider variety of complex grammatical structures, such as conditional sentences or relative clauses, while maintaining your current level of accuracy.

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