Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 5.5)

Dear James and Jenne,

I am writing this letter in order to show my interest in the jobs which is advertised.

First of all, I would like to start my introduction so that you guys could understand my overview. I ma been living here in Perth, Australia since three years and working as a early child educator after completing my study in relevant course. Now when I saw the advertisement regarding your situation about teaching my language for year to your two children.

Additionally, I am a husband with three child so, I can understand feeling of children towards parents and outsider so, I can surely help your children not only in terms of teaching and can help them with the manner and positive cultural vibes towards society, family.

This would help to grow myself in this field more better and with the experience from this opportunity, I can definitely update this valuable asset in my resume and will help me to get into the better position in the future.

Than you for your consideration. Hoping best response from you. Please let me know if you need any assistance from my side.

Best Regards,

Anish

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The response covers all three bullet points required by the prompt. You explain your suitability by mentioning your background in early childhood education, suggest additional help by offering to teach manners and cultural values, and provide reasons for wanting the job, such as professional development. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited and the tone is occasionally informal (e.g., 'you guys'). To reach a higher band, ensure that your reasons for wanting the job are more clearly linked to the specific context of the family's needs rather than just your own resume building. The letter structure is appropriate for a formal request.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices such as 'First of all', 'Additionally', and 'This would help'. However, the flow between sentences is sometimes mechanical, and the transition between the introduction and the body paragraphs is slightly abrupt. The referencing is generally clear, though some sentences are fragmented, which impacts the overall flow. To improve, focus on using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that each paragraph has a clear topic sentence that connects smoothly to the next.

Lexical Resource — Band 5.5

Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, allowing you to convey your message clearly. You use relevant terms like 'early child educator', 'advertisement', and 'professional development' (implied). However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and collocation, such as 'my overview' instead of 'my background' and 'grow myself in this field more better', which is grammatically awkward and lexically imprecise. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and avoiding repetitive or overly simplistic phrasing. Expanding your range of descriptive adjectives would also enhance the quality of your writing.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0

You attempt a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent errors throughout the text. Examples include 'I ma been living' (tense error), 'jobs which is advertised' (subject-verb agreement), and 'three child' (pluralization error). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with comma usage. While these errors do not completely impede communication, they are frequent enough to distract the reader. To improve, focus on mastering basic subject-verb agreement, correct verb tenses, and ensuring that your complex sentences are constructed accurately without missing auxiliary verbs or articles.

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