Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear sir,
I'm currently working in language institute which is in British language institute. I'm writing you to informe about the job advertisement which you posted.
I'm working in this classes for last 2 years. I teach student to English language. I watched your advertisement that you are looking for someone who teach your children. I have interest to do this work for your children because I'm handling babies for last 5 years. I can handle them very easily. I'm very insterested about to know about your children skills. Not only this but I also can teach them maths. I'm very good at numbers. If you are busy in your work so, that time I can manage my class. So, there is someone in your house who look your children in your absence.
The reason, why I want this job because now I don't want to job. I want to build trusted relationship by my own with others. And, I want to build my own language institute. So, I'm resigning for from this job. So, I can give time to your children.
I hope I will teach your children our language. I will look forward to hearing from you.
Yours faithfully,
Dhruvi Barot
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For example, when you mention being able to teach maths, it is a good addition, but the explanation of your suitability relies heavily on repetitive phrasing like 'I can handle them'. To improve, try to provide more specific examples of your teaching methods or your experience with children to make your application more persuasive and professional.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter is organised into paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. However, the use of cohesive devices is quite basic and sometimes mechanical. Phrases like 'Not only this but I also' and 'So' are used frequently, which makes the flow feel a bit repetitive. To reach a higher band, try to use a wider variety of linking words and transition phrases (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Consequently', 'In addition to this') to connect your ideas more smoothly and create a more natural, professional tone.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it is quite limited and repetitive. You frequently use simple verbs like 'do', 'work', and 'teach'. There are also some inaccuracies in word choice, such as 'I'm working in this classes' (should be 'I have been working in these classes') and 'I'm very interested about to know' (should be 'I am very interested in learning about'). To improve, focus on using more precise professional vocabulary related to childcare and education, and ensure you are using the correct prepositions with your adjectives.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors throughout the letter. Common issues include subject-verb agreement ('someone who teach' instead of 'someone who teaches'), article usage ('in British language institute'), and tense consistency ('I'm working in this classes for last 2 years' should be 'I have been working in these classes for the last two years'). While these errors do not completely prevent the reader from understanding your message, they are frequent enough to impact the overall clarity and professional quality of your writing.
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