Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-07

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.0)

Dear Madam,

I am writing to inform you that i am interested in the advertisement. I am available to work with your kids as a language teacher.

My name is Kiran Kaur. I am 26 years old and a mother of a 3 -years child. As for job requirements, I completed my studies in the french language. Moreover, I speaks other languages also, such as English, Spanish, Hindi, Punjabi, and Korean. So, I am a multilingual person. I taught English in college. I have 6 years of experience. I think I am perfect for this job.

In addition, I also studied Early Childhood Education. In which you have to take care of the kids. I worked as a teacher in a Daycare for 2 years. So, I will also take care of your children. If you are not at home. I can multitask at one time.

I need this job because, i need some money to start my own business. So, according to me, this job will be perfect for me because it will increase my experience. I hope you will like my experience and reply to me.

Yours Sincerely,

Kiran Kaur.

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0

The letter covers all three bullet points: your suitability, additional help, and your reasons for applying. However, the development of these points is somewhat basic. While you mention your language skills and experience, the explanation of why you are 'perfect' for the job could be more persuasive. The reason for wanting the job—to earn money for a business—is clear but could be framed more professionally to suit the context of a formal application. To reach a higher band, ensure that your ideas are expanded with more detail, such as specific teaching methodologies or how your childcare experience would benefit this particular family.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.5

The letter is organized into logical paragraphs, which helps the reader follow your points. You use some cohesive devices like 'Moreover,' 'In addition,' and 'So,' though some of these transitions feel a bit mechanical or repetitive. The progression of ideas is generally clear, but the flow between sentences could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that pronouns clearly refer back to the intended nouns. The paragraphing is appropriate for a formal letter, and the overall structure is easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, successfully using terms like 'multilingual,' 'Early Childhood Education,' and 'multitask.' However, there are some inaccuracies in word choice and phrasing, such as 'I speaks' (subject-verb agreement) and 'a 3-years child' (incorrect noun phrase structure). While your vocabulary is sufficient to convey your meaning, it lacks the flexibility and precision required for higher bands. Focusing on more natural collocations and ensuring correct word forms will help improve your score in this area.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5

You use a mix of simple and some complex sentence structures. However, there are frequent grammatical errors that, while not impeding communication, are noticeable. Examples include 'i am' (lowercase 'i'), 'a 3-years child' (should be 'a 3-year-old child'), 'I speaks' (should be 'I speak'), and 'In which you have to take care of the kids' (a sentence fragment). Punctuation is also inconsistent, particularly with sentence boundaries. To improve, focus on subject-verb agreement, correct article usage, and ensuring that every sentence has a clear subject and verb.

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