Band 5.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 5.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-08
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 5.5)
dear sir,
i am responding to your advertisement to teach your two childres my language. i would abale for year. i am a parfect parson for this job because i am friendly and responsible person and i injoy with working with childron. i have good knolage of my language.
i explane words and gramor in simple way. i also use games for learn your children.
i would healp the students for study and i will play with them. it will healpfull for your family. i will introduce my calture and more good things.
i like this job because i like to meat with new peoples and i would love this operchtunity. it is more injoyable in australia.i loved to get this job and your children are also injoy it with me.
i am also so happy to join it. i loved a children most .i play a knolage games with them. that more healpful for them to know my language.
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 5.5 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 5.5 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.0 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.0 |
| Overall | 5.5 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 5.5
The response addresses all three bullet points: suitability, additional help, and reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is quite basic. For instance, while you mention being friendly and responsible, you do not provide specific examples of your teaching experience or qualifications. The tone is somewhat informal and repetitive, which is acceptable for a letter, but the lack of depth in explaining how you would teach the language limits the score. To improve, try to expand on your specific teaching methods or past experiences to make your application more persuasive and professional.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 5.5
The letter is organized into short paragraphs, which helps the reader follow the structure. However, the use of cohesive devices is very limited and often repetitive (e.g., 'I also', 'I will', 'it will'). There is a lack of sophisticated linking words or transitions between sentences, making the flow feel somewhat mechanical. The progression of ideas is clear, but the connections between sentences could be smoother. To improve, try using a wider variety of linking phrases such as 'Furthermore', 'In addition to this', or 'Consequently' to connect your thoughts more naturally.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.0
The vocabulary is quite basic and repetitive, with frequent spelling errors that occasionally make the text difficult to read (e.g., 'childres', 'abale', 'parfect', 'knolage', 'operchtunity'). While the meaning is generally conveyed, the range of vocabulary is limited to very simple, everyday words. There is little attempt to use more precise or descriptive language suitable for a job application. To improve, focus on learning the correct spelling of common words and try to incorporate more specific vocabulary related to teaching and childcare.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.0
The response relies heavily on simple sentence structures. There are frequent grammatical errors throughout the text, including issues with subject-verb agreement ('I loved a children'), article usage, and verb tense consistency ('I would abale for year'). Punctuation is also inconsistent, with some sentences lacking proper capitalization. While the message is understandable, the high frequency of errors in basic grammar prevents the text from reaching a higher band. Focusing on sentence construction and proofreading for basic errors would significantly improve your writing.
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