Band 6.0 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer
Overall Band Score: 6.0 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09
IELTS Writing Task 1 question
You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter
- explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
- say what else you could do for the family
- give your reasons for wanting the job
You do NOT need to write any addresses.
Begin your letter as follows:
Dear .................. ,
Student answer (Band 6.0)
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing to request the opportunity to teach Hindi to your toddlers, as mentioned in the advertisement. I would appreciate it if you could give this wonderful opportunity to help your children.
To begin with, I would like to explain why i am perfect for this chance. I have an excellent command of the Hindi language. This is mainly i born in India and I learned and experienced this language from my childhood. Consequently, I have a great command of the basics, like grammar, sentences so on.
Furthermore, I can provide material to parents that can help to children reach an intermediate level in just inn 6 months and advanced in a year. As a result, Hindi would be cut off for your children.
Finally, I would like to do this job because i want to collect money for my tuition fee and I do not want to disturb my parents for my students.
Thank you for
AI examiner evaluation
| Criterion | Band |
|---|---|
| Task Achievement / Task Response | 6.0 |
| Coherence and Cohesion | 6.0 |
| Lexical Resource | 5.5 |
| Grammatical Range and Accuracy | 5.5 |
| Overall | 6.0 |
Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 6.0
You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. However, the development of these ideas is somewhat limited. For instance, your explanation of what else you could do for the family is vague, and the phrase 'Hindi would be cut off for your children' is unclear and likely misused. To improve, ensure your ideas are fully explained and relevant to the context of a family seeking a tutor. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter, though the ending is incomplete.
Coherence and Cohesion — Band 6.0
The letter follows a logical structure with clear paragraphing. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'To begin with,' 'Furthermore,' and 'Finally' to signal the progression of your ideas. However, the flow is occasionally interrupted by awkward phrasing, such as the transition between your background and your teaching materials. Additionally, the letter ends abruptly with 'Thank you for', which leaves the closing incomplete and affects the overall coherence of the final section. Using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring a complete sign-off would improve the flow.
Lexical Resource — Band 5.5
Your vocabulary is adequate for the task, but it lacks the precision and range required for higher bands. You use some basic errors in word choice, such as 'collect money' instead of 'earn money' or 'save for,' and 'disturb my parents' which does not fit the context of financial independence. The phrase 'cut off' is used incorrectly here. To reach a higher band, focus on using more natural collocations and precise terminology related to teaching and professional communication. Avoid repetitive phrasing and ensure your word choices accurately reflect your intended meaning.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 5.5
You demonstrate a mix of simple and complex sentence structures, but there are frequent grammatical errors that occasionally impede clarity. Examples include 'This is mainly i born in India' (should be 'This is mainly because I was born in India') and 'help to children reach' (should be 'help children reach'). There are also issues with subject-verb agreement and article usage. While these errors do not completely prevent understanding, they are frequent enough to lower the score. Focus on proofreading for basic tense consistency and correct preposition usage to improve your accuracy.
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