Band 6.5 IELTS Writing Task 1 Model Answer

Overall Band Score: 6.5 · Cambridge IELTS 15 · 2026-09-09

IELTS Writing Task 1 question

You have seen an advertisement from a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their two children your language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. In your letter

• explain why you think you would be suitable for the job
• say what else you could do for the family
• give your reasons for wanting the job

You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Begin your letter as follows:

Dear .................. ,

Student answer (Band 6.5)

Dear Sir/Madam,

Hope this email finds you well. I am writing regarding the job you posted in the magazine 'The Hindustan times'.

Last week, I read magazine and came to know that you are looking for teacher who can teach your children Hindi language for a year. I have great command on Hindi language because this is my first language. Additionally, I have two year experience in the India as a primary school teacher. So, I am completely aware about the children's behaviour.

Secondly, I am also mother of two children, and I know how to handle children in different situations. I can easily take care of them whenever family is out. Moreover, I can assist kids to develop motor skills while playing the learning games.

Finally, I would really appreciate if I could able to secure this job, as I am a student right now. I need money to pay my fees. This job would allow me to repay my college fees. I will make sure that there is no room for complaint.

Hope to hear from you soon.

Yours faithfully,

Poonam

AI examiner evaluation

Task Achievement / Task Response — Band 7.0

You have addressed all three bullet points in the prompt: explaining your suitability, offering additional help, and stating your reasons for wanting the job. The tone is generally appropriate for a formal letter. However, the development of ideas is somewhat basic. For instance, while you mention your experience as a primary teacher, expanding slightly more on specific teaching methods or activities for children would have strengthened your application. The purpose of the letter is clear, and the response is well-structured to meet the requirements of the task.

Coherence and Cohesion — Band 7.0

The letter is logically organized with a clear introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. You use basic cohesive devices such as 'Additionally', 'Secondly', 'Moreover', and 'Finally' to transition between ideas. While these are effective, the flow could be improved by using a wider variety of linking words and ensuring that the relationship between sentences is more sophisticated. Paragraphing is used correctly to separate different topics, which helps the reader follow your argument easily. Overall, the progression of ideas is clear and easy to follow.

Lexical Resource — Band 6.0

You demonstrate an adequate range of vocabulary for the task, using terms like 'command', 'assist', and 'secure'. However, there are some minor inaccuracies and awkward phrasings, such as 'I read magazine' (missing an article) and 'I am also mother of two children' (missing an article). The vocabulary is functional and allows you to convey your message clearly, but it lacks the precision and variety required for a higher band score. To improve, focus on using more natural collocations and ensuring articles are used correctly with nouns.

Grammatical Range and Accuracy — Band 6.0

You use a mix of simple and complex sentence structures. There are several grammatical errors, such as 'I have two year experience' (should be 'two years' experience'), 'I could able to' (should be 'I would be able to'), and 'whenever family is out' (missing an article). While these errors are noticeable, they do not impede communication. Your control over basic grammar is generally good, but you need to pay closer attention to subject-verb agreement, article usage, and the correct formation of modal verb structures to achieve a higher score.

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